Zar the mercenary (part one) by Richard Johnson

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		Date Added: September 23, 2004 00:09:01	Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Zar the mercenary (part one)

Night is swiftly aproaching as the man struggles to keep going. He is so exhausted and hungry. He is sick and tired of this seemingly endless forest. It's canopy is so dense that he can only catch a small glimpse of the sky above every so often. It is like living is a world of perpetual dusk, not dark but not light either. Zar still had not seen any living thing since he entered this strange place. "If I don't find some water soon I am going to be in some serious trouble." He mutters. He had used the last of his water from his canteen earlier in the day and could already feel his mind telling him that he was getting thirsty. Zar has been listening for the sounds of running water for over a day but the dark imposing canopy of the trees seemed to suppress even most of the sound. The only sound he has heard for the last couple of days has been the sounds made by him as he ran through the forest. Zar spots a very large oak tree with a growth of soft moss on the ground beneath it. Zar decides that this is a good spot to stop and rest for a while. He sat down on the soft bed of moss and leaned back against the massive trunk of the old oak tree. His eyelids are so heavy and his body is exhausted after running almost nonstop for two days. He slowly allows his eyes to close, he figures he will get up in an hour or so and start off again. He awakes with a start. "How long have I been asleep?" He asks himself. Zar looks up to try and judge the time by the sky. From what little he can see it appears to be early morning. "Oh well, no harm I quess." He says, he had heard no sounds of pursuit for over a day and a half now. Zar pauses for a moment and starts to recall the events that had occurred and how he had come to find himself in this predicament.....

Author's Notes:

This is my first attempt at a short story and this is the first part of the story. If people like it I will continue with the story.

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	Comment By: ConjugatingWizard on September 8, 2005 08:19:07 PM	Report
	I liked this alot I hope that you keep up this style u earned the award Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: joia on July 30, 2005 04:16:52 PM	Report
	The intro did its job, I was ready to turn the page and read on. Story telling is an art onto itself, and you have the talent. Will we hear "the rest of the story?" Great job so far, joia Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: RichardM on July 28, 2005 09:57:34 PM	Report
	Reading this chapter again, its just as great as last time! Congratulations Richard!! Rich Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: Jeff on July 28, 2005 08:31:34 AM	Report
	Congratulations on being honored on a great write, Jeff Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: LindaM on July 27, 2005 11:10:43 PM	Report
	Congratulations on winning the award for this wonderful piece. Linda Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: Cathy on July 26, 2005 09:54:23 PM	Report
	What an amaziing first attempt so very excellent loved it. Congratulations on your well deserved award Bravo to you Cathy Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: Robert Neal on July 26, 2005 10:13:23 AM	Report
	I would say this is far more than an attempt, and if you are properly inspired it may grow beyond a short story and become a novel or more ... well done. Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: Samantha Firefly on July 26, 2005 07:00:49 AM	Report
	This is a very interesting beginning. Congratulations on your award. Samantha. Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: Gay Johnson on July 25, 2005 08:31:46 PM	Report
	Oh babe, I'm so happy for you. I new this was your calling. Not poetry but writing. I love you Gentle Dove Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: Lady Literary on July 25, 2005 08:29:22 PM	Report
	and????? lol Congrats on the award.. Lisa Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: Lady Literary on July 25, 2005 06:16:59 PM	Report
	and????? lol Congrats on the award.. Lisa Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: The Bag Lady on July 25, 2005 03:31:11 PM	Report
	And, here you have captured an award with Zar~! Good for you, Richard~! Margaret...the bag lady Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: RichardM on July 18, 2005 12:18:39 AM	Report
	This is the start of something really nice. A great beginning it is! Rich Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: Leonard Wilson on September 29, 2004 02:41:15 PM	Report
	I think you have found you niche,Richard.This story is very well told, indeed.I really liked the tease,at the end..Gets the reader [me] interested in finding out more.Well written,Richard....REALLY!I don't believe in spreading honey on a dung pile. I really like this...len Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: The Bag Lady on September 23, 2004 02:14:26 PM	Report
	Very interesting write, Richard, and I am loving the name "Zar"...I see an action figure in the future~ I will now roll my cart to part two of your work~ Keep writing, my friend.... Margaret...the old bag lady, who saw a flash of Zar Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: Carrie on September 23, 2004 09:24:00 AM	Report
	I think this is a great 1st part, Richard. Please keep writing. Can't wait for part two. Carrie Respond To This Comment

	Comment By: Gay Johnson on September 23, 2004 01:12:02 AM	Report
	Bravo Babe. This is awesome. See, I told you you could write. love you Gentle Dove Respond To This Comment