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Author Name: Freetruegirl 4 Comments
Date Added: January 26, 2005 14:01:22 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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huanted soul
My past haunts my mended soul I wish to forget the terrible memories But it always comes back at me I can't climb out of this deep hole I may have been something but now i'm not I have changed for the better Yet I am still rained on by past weather I thought my wrongs were now forgot But I am still reminded of the wrongs I've done Even after all these years have passed The unrighteous judgement still lasts And many more are to come I'm now paying for my early sins My consequences are hard to take But I always have a smile so sad and fake As I feel the pain killing me within I am truly sorry for all my wrongs And my guilt is enough for me I wish they would just let me be But no matter how much hate I will always stand strong.
Author's Notes:
I know this sucks if anyone could help maybe by refrasing this or editing it a little I will be greatly aprecciated thanks so much!
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Comment By: FreeAutumn E. on November 9, 2008 05:24:15 PM Report
This poem is true to its title.  Very haunting.  You have some great lines in here. . .

 

I am till rained on by past weather. . .

The unrighteous judgement still lasts. . .

I feel the pain killing me from within. . .

 

When I right poems, I use a traditional stucture of stanzas.  Maybe you could try that, just a suggestion, but it might help you!  The poem is good, don't be so hard on yourself.  You have potential to be unlocked.  Believe in yourself!!

 

Much love ~ Autumn

Comment By: FreeCynthia Jones on January 28, 2005 02:45:24 PM Report
Whitney, I can feel the anger throughout this write. I hope everything becomes better for you. *S* Wind Whisperer
Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on January 27, 2005 11:09:17 AM Report
whitney,i have made a copy and i will try to rework this for you,this has so much potential,you have laid the foundation,now lets build something beautiful,joe
Comment By: FreeShadow on January 26, 2005 03:11:52 PM Report
Okay this really wasn't that bad it would be really great if you re-phrased some of it. If you need any help or advise just come to me and ask. I will try to help you all I can.





 


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