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Author Name: Freedyoung 4 Comments
Date Added: April 02, 2005 22:04:45 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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A poem should have an amazing opening line;
One which defines the subject wholly.
A line to let the reader know
Which direction the poet will go.

Here I've sat at this computer
Thinking maybe I'm stuck because I lack a pen.
But writing of you is as complicated
As writing of where my heart's been. And I smile.
This is where my poem dissolves.
How can I write words that convey
That you are the sun around which I revolve? Here I sigh.
And this is where my thoughts disband.
How can I describe your power on me?
Your complete and pure command? Here I stay.
For no words written will incite
My heart to reveal what it yearns to proclaim
As I think of you tonight.

Author's Notes:
Feel so in love - have no words. Darn mind, hands, and heart aren't cooperating...
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Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on April 26, 2005 10:20:30 PM Report
oh my dear Dori! What a wonderful state to be in. A blessed state and no mistake!!!
Alison SW
Comment By: FreeA.P. on April 6, 2005 10:52:22 PM Report
aaah how this is something that happens to me: whenever i have something i'm so passionate and want to write about, i just stare...i can't think of the perfect enough words to describe it. And then i usually write a poem about writer's block, hehe. Anyways, you did a great job of expressing how special he is to you in not be able to express it (if that makes sense). I liked the format and the style that this piece followed...nicely done
good write
Comment By: PremiumPaul on April 4, 2005 08:42:04 PM Report
I found my response here turning into a poem So you will have to see "God Given Masterpiece" to see my comment other than to say both you and Chad are great friends and great people.
Comment By: PremiumMary Lou Allen on April 3, 2005 09:34:47 AM Report
Oh, but they are cooperating, Dori. They are cooperating perfectly. You just stand back and see. This is the sweetest love story, even a man who doesn't like poetry would have to blush at this. What a guy. Well done, pal. Very well done. ML


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