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Date Added: April 05, 2005 16:04:59 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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There is a place which humans call hell.

In that darkness evil does dwell.

All alone, lost in shame.

A childs fallen down in pain.

Trapped within the eternal night.

He searches vainly for the light

Finally he's reached a mountain of sin

To reach the top, a spot in heven he'll win.

Now to begin his long lonely climb.

Hopefully he'll reach the top in time


Treking through eveny and greed.

The child spots a shimmer, a gleam.

Reaching foward, towards the shimmering flicker.

It shatters with a snide snicker.


Pushing past gluttony and sloth.

There comes a form of a man of cloth.

He smiles so sweetly, his arms open wide.

But something is wrong, something he hides.


One step foward, one step back.

Then the devil begins his attack.

Why do you fight when you know'll fail.

You'll never ever escape from this hell.

Forever bound in this fiery pit.

This is what the faiths have knit.

Give up now, your a child of dammed.

Never to be part of gods great plan


Time ticked forever on a shattered clock

The child stood still on razor sharp rocks.

Pushing back pain, holding back dismay.

The devils words were held at bay.

Stumbling up the mountainous rock.

Times running out on the shattered clock.


Struggling through lust, wading through pride.

A whip falls down on the childs soft hide.

Crying out, falling down.

He's gone to far to back out now.


Crawling upwards on his hands and knees.

His broken body begins to bleed.

Very faintly he see's a light.

 Inching foward, he contuines the fight.


Finally reaching the last seventh of sin.

The child realizes he's about to win.

Now to rush through angers tide.

Maybe he'll make it through alive


After defeating all seven of sins.

The child knows he's going to win.

Crawling foward to heavens gate.

The child waits to see his fate.


Tears fall down from his blinded eyes.

As heavenly voices fill the sky.

And finally he's brought back to the promised land.

Finallys he's held, by gods loving hands.

Author's Notes:
This is to prove that nothing is Impossible. That in the most hellish times of your life there will be a way out... It may be painful.... it may be hard..... It may take all your courage to accomplish it... But you can.... If only you throw everything you have into it.... and keep climbing upwards... no matter what..
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Comment By: Freebrianna on October 22, 2005 01:09:44 AM Report
oh my. this poem is amazing i cant believe it is even posible for it to flow that beautiflly without being forced. i love your writing it is so.. i am a loss for words.. it is awsome. Please continue writing i am going to enjoy reading them.
Comment By: on September 26, 2005 03:32:33 PM Report
I Agree With Britney Mind Changing . This Is A Good Poem I Liked This Writting Alot . Very Good Keep Writting Guy !
Comment By: FreeBrittanie on July 23, 2005 09:38:38 PM Report
I don't know what it is, but there is just something about your writings that make me change my mind about something. AMAZING. Thank you.
Comment By: FreeBrittanie on July 23, 2005 09:36:48 PM Report
I don't know what it is, but there is just something about your writings that make me change my mind about something. AMAZING. Thank you.
Comment By: FreeSweetSunshine on May 26, 2005 12:28:31 PM Report
I absolutely loved this, Michael, you did a fantastic job on it. The simple truth of what you brought across is such an important thing to know when going through life. Keep climbing, keep going. Thank you for sharing this. :) Ah yes, and congratulations on your award!

Comment By: PremiumLindaM on May 24, 2005 12:57:01 AM Report
This is a wonderful poem Michael.
It is so deserving of the award.
Comment By: FreeJeff on May 23, 2005 10:10:27 PM Report
Impressive write...congratulations.

Comment By: FreeSavanahB on April 18, 2005 10:16:53 AM Report
Very nice work indeed, Michael. Not an easy climb to salvation, but then I don't suppose it's meant to me. Profound message of stubborn determination to succeed is clearly defined. Wonderful read - Savanah
Comment By: FreeMichael Barnicle on April 12, 2005 12:38:46 PM Report
Yes great write. Very good...Keep on writing and I'll keep reading.
Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on April 6, 2005 08:04:22 AM Report
Michael: this is a great write. Very well constructed.

Lady Dragonwyck


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