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Author Name: Freewritelady 5 Comments
Date Added: February 18, 2006 23:02:09 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Untitled as of yet...

"Shadow of my former self,
turned over a brand new leaf, why, I'm a brand new man.
I gave up drinkin to be with her,
stay home and hold her hand."

"He used to go out pert near e'ery Saturday night,
cussin and carousin with them there Poke boys.
But yesirreee, he sits home and watches Andy Griffith with me now.
Don't think he misses it a bit; do ya Honey?"

Adjusting suspender straps..
"Well, now them Poke boys were a heap of fun,
but I reckon I have just as much here with you Rosey."

"Aw  Del, you say the sweetest things," she blushes.
"Would you like me to get you some coffee, ma'am?"

Yes, that would be really nice, thank you.
She rises, smoothes down her dress and apron,
and heads toward the kitchen.
I hear her rattling around in there.

"You see uh, June, well, she's got this old timer's thing going on,"
You mean Alzheimer's? I interrupted.
"Yea, that's it. Doc Farley says it'll never get no better.
I got to thinking about all the times I had left her,
things I shoulda did and said; felt sorrier for myself at that point.
Made up my mind that I was gonna change, yesiree,
be the man I used to be.
Now, why she's happier than a pig in a poke I tell ya,
and I feel better too."

Rosey returns.
"Del, where did you put the Folger's?
It ain't where it should be."

"I'll be right back."
He gives me a knowing wink, and they disappear into the kitchen.
This old farmhouse must be well over eighty years old. Still has the faded wallpaper from
maybe the forties..I scribble some more on my notepad, and wait for their return...

Author's Notes:
Really not sure where I'm going with this, but thinking about making it into a short story of sorts..me, as someone doing research on the disease within different time frames,..like I said, not sure. Anyhow, let me know your thoughts..thanks.
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Comments:
Comment By: FreeCindy Bendel on March 8, 2006 12:37:04 PM Report
Cool write Barbie...i like it but then im no critic or scholar. Works well for me, i was drawn right into the story.

You are brave, i have some short stories and some prose that i am scared to death to post anywhere....my poet's heart is weak and cries easily at harsh comments.lol

You got the touch girl!Write on...

~Cindy
Comment By: Freelilac on February 21, 2006 01:29:41 PM Report
I like it, it's interesting. on my way to read the next two!
Comment By: FreeGlata on February 20, 2006 09:58:29 AM Report
agree with everyone else...It's a great start...but since i've read the other two installments, I know now where it's going, and it's so sad...
Love this, though...Love YOU gal!
Glata
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on February 19, 2006 07:50:55 PM Report
I think it's a great start to a very good storyline...Looking forward to more of the story...About time you posted a short story here, gal...Love ya...len
Comment By: FreeLinear Z on February 19, 2006 07:53:11 AM Report
I think it is working Barbie. I had a little trouble following who was narrating, but that could just be me. I think you have a great story here.




 


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