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Author Name: FreeSensual Sorceress 37 Comments
Date Added: September 11, 2007 06:09:44 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Don't Shoot The Messenger

I wanted to leave,
But I stayed.
Because you
Couldn't run away.
Always tomorrow,
Never today.
The price was high,
We all paid.
Don't press me,
'Cause I'll explode-
Shrapnel Ricocheting,
Wherever I go.
Don't ask why-
Do what you're told.
I was torn apart,
And left behind.
The prototype;
A new design,
Your crash dummy
Took what was mine.
Turn up the heat,
I'm almost cold.
Burn fossil fuel,
Allah's black gold.
Martyrs and Morons (modern m and m's)
Waging war.
What the hell
Are we there for?
Kill for God,
Country, and Corps.
"Today, near Baghdad,
The fighting's thick."
"Medic! Hurry!
I've been hit."
"It's not bad, Sarge,
You ain't gonna die"
"Son...United States
Marines, don't tell lies..
You tell my family
I said good-bye."
An American flag drapes
Her husband's coffin,
As one more lounge lizard
Asks "do you come here often?"
That my friends is what
People are dying for..
They die for America
The Beautiful...
~AMERICA~
Bush's painted whore.

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Comments:
Comment By: FreeMoon Fairy on June 7, 2009 02:22:27 AM Report
Jolen,
Dang, I am sorry I missed this. Excellent write!
The last line just makes me dislike him
even more.
Congratulations!!

Hugs,
~Tracie

Comment By: FreeSteven on March 16, 2009 08:30:31 AM Report
This was extravagant! Excellent work, Jolan, you're incredible!

=]

Comment By: FreeRobert Smith on December 23, 2008 11:42:28 PM Report
Wow, what a powerful write, Tinker this is well worthy of the prize. "Happy mid winter festivities and all the best for 2009" - Rob

 

"Those who have tasted war from near or far will forever be walking wounded"

Comment By: FreeCathy on July 19, 2008 11:52:08 AM Report
Excellent once again as can be told by the award Congrats on this one also excellent write this definately deserved the award
........hugs Cathy

Comment By: FreeSteve on April 17, 2008 11:30:29 PM Report
Excellent poem.....those who  committed the mortal sin of the war will be dammed for eternity.
Comment By: FreePaul Peter McLean on July 26, 2007 11:04:30 PM Report
Great work, Jolen, capturing and describing perfectly both the insanity behind the war in Iraq, and the human tragedies that it costs people on all sides every day. A worthy winner of the FP award.
Comment By: FreeNick on July 11, 2007 04:54:06 PM Report
There is a very strong feeling given in this poem. A story is being told, for sure, very well. A strong sense of ideals as well as a sense of loss, throughout the entire piece. You keeping the lines short made a sort of distortion for the reader, like most people feel when these events take place.

 

The only problem I have with this poem is that you switch rhyming styles mid poem. You start off rhyming every other line for three lines, then you switch to two lines. Other than that, this was well written and well received.

 

Congrats on the award.

 ~ Nick ~

Comment By: FreeAdri on July 4, 2007 08:42:48 AM Report
Congratulations on winning the FP award
Adri x

Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on July 3, 2007 09:53:23 PM Report
Ms S.S.:  super congrats on your very deserved Feature Poem Award.  Awesome write as usual.

 

Lady D

Comment By: FreeCHRISSY on April 13, 2007 11:12:36 AM Report
This is a powerful write. Ugh I hate war. Especially war within society.

Well written

Comment By: FreePamela A. Lamppa on November 28, 2006 04:02:08 AM Report
Man that last line really served up quite a visual, and an exceptional one at that.  It is a sad commentary on our day to have "W" at the helm.....This war is truly out of control and there is very little support left for it.  Well done dear friend.  An excellent piece. ~Pam
Comment By: FreeLast Temple Knight on November 27, 2006 07:47:21 PM Report
We hope to stay safe in our homes no matter where we call 'home'... inside the U.S. or not when things get truly rough nobody's going to be safe...  The one person who might be a saviour may also turn out to be the one who bring it all crashing down around us.
Comment By: PremiumKeith Overstreet on November 23, 2006 09:46:53 PM Report
A powerful piece, Jolen!

Awesome job!

 

Good to see you back.

 

KeithRay

Comment By: FreeHenry M. on November 5, 2006 10:04:36 AM Report
Wow! You really hit it hard with this Jody, emotions laid bare here with your powerful words! So tell me Jody, how do you really feel about this war and our beloved President???  Hang a great big star on this one Jody, simply a fantastic rant!!    Henry
Comment By: FreeKaren Marrah on November 5, 2006 09:51:06 AM Report
This is a very powerful write here Jolen. I too applaud you for having the courage to speak out and write about how you feel. Have a great day!

 

~Karen~

Comment By: PremiumDavid Turner on November 5, 2006 06:06:22 AM Report
Difficult to comment on this Jolen - but you capture wellthe madness and absurdity of the whole situation. Just heard that Saddam has been sentenced todeath - now things will get really nasty I expect. Where will it all end? We may yet prove T S Elliot wrong!

 

"This is the way the World ends,

Not with a bang but a whimper!"

 

David

Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on November 4, 2006 11:38:23 AM Report
Jolen,
Boy.. you have said it all now and with such class I love this so much.. a great pen that wrote the truth... awesome as always ~ hugs ~ Scarlett

Comment By: FreeAdri on November 4, 2006 10:16:05 AM Report
Brilliant!!  I love this.  You just have this way... 
Adri x

Comment By: FreeThe Mystic Poet on July 4, 2006 11:15:14 PM Report
Nice write though lol!
Comment By: FreeThe Mystic Poet on July 4, 2006 11:14:56 PM Report
Better a live whore than a dead one. Better a whore than a coward. Better Republican than Democrat......lol
Comment By: FreeHelen on May 13, 2006 06:25:57 PM Report
I hate war.
Comment By: FreeMichael on April 23, 2006 02:32:13 AM Report
James Joyce would have liked this, too, Lady Jolen! YLM
Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on March 30, 2006 02:55:10 AM Report
excellent rant sis.
Over here we are seeing the same thing. One young guy was sent to Irac an hour after his passing out parade. he joined the army hoping for a better life. In no time at all he was dead. and what for? they hate our guts over there.
Its turning into another Vietnam
Makes me feel despairing for humanity
Ali x
Comment By: FreeSharon Jorcil James on March 25, 2006 06:10:19 PM Report
No one in his/her right mind will dare shoot the messenger for bearing this piece of truth. Hooray to you my dear friend....because you told it like it is and because I share the same views. Another fantastic write.

Sharon JJ
Comment By: FreeMark S. Valence on March 25, 2006 12:42:38 AM Report
Well Ms Sorceress, as a writer and poet and ex-sailor, you've written a good poem......BUT. We can sit on our asses and let them hit us again or we can take it to them. I think taking to them is better. The best defense is a good offense. As they say, " I don't want to die for my country, I want the other guy to die for his country!" I know...maybe if we just talk to them and let them know just how nice they really are. Look how nice they treat their women (their dogs have more rights then their women).
Comment By: FreeShane Arnold on March 24, 2006 05:14:35 PM Report
wow I like it as you may not know I am against this war for oil and pretty much against this so called democracy even though the huge corporations are able to pressure goverments into doing what they want. I especially like the ending "~AMERICA~ Bush's painted whore" great writing
Comment By: FreeRoger Bacon on March 23, 2006 11:15:04 PM Report
Good poetry starts with honesty. If the poet isn't honest the reader will see it every time, whether the reader agrees or not with the write.
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on March 16, 2006 07:18:42 PM Report
Ameen, Sister Rosie!..Amen..I love the terse style of this rant..Beautifully stated, Aces..It's getting harder and harder to be proud to be an American..Now we have a national deficit of eight, count 'em, ehight TRILLION dollars... They impeached poor Bill for mistaking Monica for a humador, fer crissake!!!..What does it take, I wonder???? Yereverwonderinfurball
Comment By: FreeScott Malthouse on March 16, 2006 03:34:00 PM Report
Political themes are usually quite difficult to tackle without sounding either too extreme or over the top. However, you have distingished this fine line and have manipulated a poem that is finely crafted around political war ideas and tugs at heart strings. I applaude your poem my friend.
Comment By: TrialAnn on March 15, 2006 10:26:18 PM Report
You tell a very true tale here. It's hard to find the words to express what many of us feel about this, but you did an admirable job.
Comment By: FreeAngel on March 15, 2006 06:50:19 PM Report
Power greed and more power. Good for nothing
Magnificent

Love Angelxx
Comment By: FreeHeike on March 15, 2006 05:50:48 PM Report
You made a powerful statement, Jody, and I sincerely hope that everyone in your country will see what you see.
~Heike
Comment By: FreeGlata on March 15, 2006 07:55:35 AM Report
Hmmm...tell us how you REALLY feel, lol! I dont think any one is in doubt as to the emotion flowing here ...
Great job putting it out there, Jody!
Hugs...Glata
Comment By: FreeLinear Z on March 15, 2006 07:04:07 AM Report
I'm sensing ome sort of subtle hostility..... ;-)
Nice poem Jolen. Yep, the world sucks, that's why I live in my own head. Keep up the good work.
Comment By: FreeHenry M. on March 15, 2006 07:03:01 AM Report
Oh yeah, what a great rip at "What the hell are we fighting for". Yes , our resident clown George, you have brought him to task beautifully Jody, I loved this!!! Henry
Comment By: Freeb doneff on March 15, 2006 05:26:39 AM Report
Ohhhhhh...wow...this gave me chills. You know where I stand on this kind of thing. I was watching the news the other night at work, and it was saying.."Three years now..looking back. " and showing pics of the car bombings etc. I thought to myself, tell me, what has changed, what have they died for, why are they not home? It just made me feel so bad I had to shut the tv off...made me feel sick inside, just sick. Wonderful as usual my little wand weilding woman. Barbie
Comment By: Freetom on March 15, 2006 03:45:33 AM Report
wonderful write Jody
hugs kisses
tom




 


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