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Author Name: FreeSensual Sorceress 44 Comments
Date Added: February 10, 2007 20:02:45 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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They Belong To You
How shall I honor you my love?
The Sistine Chapel has been painted,
And the Taj Mahal already built.
I could try composing a concerto,
Or some symphony to transcend time.
Although I am no master poet,
Nor bard with words sublime.
I cannot lasso the moon
Or gift you with the stars.
All of these magical things
Are beyond my mortal reach.
I would gladly prostrate myself
Before you, and sit
Happily at your feet.
Or remain completely still,
Until you bid me speak.
I cannot encircle the heavens,
Or cast forth the chains of hell.
But I can follow where you lead,
and in to the darkness, dwell.
I have no riches to share,
Nor hope of great acclaim.
I am unworthy of your love,
Yet, I hope my devotion will do.
I cannot offer up my blood,
My breath, or  eternal soul
Because, my love,
They already belong to you.
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Many thanks ML!

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Comment By: PremiumBlake Hightdudis on February 16, 2007 11:00:36 PM Report

Wonderful write, images you borught to bear were great :) congrats on your award


 


Comment By: FreeLubaina on January 8, 2007 01:42:57 PM Report
Words alone cannot express the emotions and the passion that is described in this poem.Your heart glows like the stars in the night and you heart beats like the ocean waves comforting yet so calming and real. You my poetic friend have a heart of gold and that is the greatest treasure you can ever give to someone else Because it is unconditional. This poem is beyond beautiful .Keep writing my poetic friend, because you are so gifted and talented beyond the words that you write. You have been so blessed deep within the very core of your soul.Thank you for being you and more then anything thank you for sharing this poem with all of us.

Lubs.

Comment By: FreeThe Mystic Poet on October 18, 2006 01:10:34 AM Report
Though you can not lasso the moon, ye sure got yer claws in me heart.
Comment By: FreeGoliath Assassin on October 9, 2006 05:12:54 PM Report
Wow... that's devotion. And humility. You sure got my arse kicked on humility, babe! More power to you! I think you sold yourself short on writing ability, though. You got plenty.
Comment By: FreeHelen on September 30, 2006 04:59:40 PM Report
soooo many comments here, what can I add???? well I just love this poem.
Comment By: FreeLubaina on September 12, 2006 08:50:49 AM Report
Wonderfully written. I loved each line and how it flowed to the next. And I know what you mean .Stay happy my friend and I hope life is treating you well.
Lubs.
Comment By: FreePia Andersson on July 26, 2006 04:23:53 AM Report
You describe it so beautifully ; the sense of belonging...a lovely tribute to the one you love -Pia

Comment By: FreeJ on June 30, 2006 10:15:49 PM Report

It's been a while since I've gone through your work but this is my favorite. Everything you say is perfect. Well done.


Comment By: FreeAbbas on May 20, 2006 08:03:40 AM Report
Humbleness and melody.
The drink of life.

Abbas.

Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on May 7, 2006 05:08:19 AM Report
Nixe poeem I like it..Maybe you could read and comment on my latest poem>Tue Blue"..I don't care if you don't like it or like it, as long as yo like it and give me a lovely comment about how MUCH you like it......Please?
Comment By: FreeAntony Frank on May 1, 2006 07:47:06 AM Report
You definitely deserved the award.
Excellent poem.

Regards,

Antony.
Comment By: FreeAdam on April 25, 2006 01:13:54 AM Report
the first 11 lines.... i like.. but then the poem takes a turn... it loses what i feel is the equality of love... maybe its my reason or my young age.. but the thought of throwing oneself to another in the name of love (although a romantic gestur as it is) does not appeal to my sense of how it should be.. yet there is always the possiblity that i've truely misunderstood your meaning and this is all futile crtique... still the words express the powerful emotion felt by the speaker, that is evident... and so it is not undeserving of the award.. but it is certain that i do not share this outlook on love with you... like i said you expressed your outlook on it well and so congratulations on the reward, and i hope that i may see a comment or two from you on my poetry and may it be as honest as my own of yours.
best regards
-Lyndz
Comment By: FreeChuck on April 18, 2006 02:47:03 PM Report
This one IS really good... and well deserving of the Feature.
Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on April 16, 2006 01:33:46 AM Report
A lovely dedication of love. Well done and well deserved award
Ali xxx
Comment By: FreeTodd on April 15, 2006 03:19:05 PM Report
A very nice piece of work Jody, and it makes me happy to see you've been recognized. Well Done!!!
Comment By: FreeSharon Jorcil James on April 15, 2006 12:39:18 PM Report
WOW!!! A myriad of beautiful images are conjured up in the reader's mind with this excepptional write. Way to go girl!!
A sheer pleasure to read...this is truly deserving of the award...
congratulations my friend!

Sharon JJ
Comment By: TrialAnn on April 15, 2006 12:15:08 AM Report
Congratulations Jody. I think it is very deserving of this award.
Comment By: Freebharti on April 14, 2006 02:05:17 PM Report
hey dear! congrats.....
lovely penned. gr8 job

luv
Comment By: PremiumSir Knight on April 13, 2006 07:22:38 AM Report
Congrats on this well deserved award. Well written and it shows the devotion of one giving all their inner self to the one they love.

Sir Knight
Comment By: FreeCindy Bendel on April 11, 2006 10:02:45 AM Report
Congrats on your award Jolen...a very beautiful poem indeed!!

~Cindy
Comment By: PremiumMary Lou Allen on April 10, 2006 09:28:06 PM Report
I knew it! I knew it! It couldn't help winning. It's magnificent! I've always said so. I'm so glad you entered this and so very happy for you that it won. It's wonderful, J. Just wonderful. Love, ML
Comment By: FreeHeike on April 10, 2006 04:05:46 PM Report
I knew it all along... This one's a winner!
Congratulations on your award, Jody!!!
~Heike
Comment By: PremiumDavid Turner on April 10, 2006 10:06:27 AM Report
Congratulations Jolen - awell derved award.

David
Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on April 9, 2006 09:36:14 PM Report
Ah Ms Sensual: congratulations on the Feature Poem Award -- very deserved; as only you can cast a spell...


Lady D
Comment By: FreeLubaina on April 1, 2006 05:33:08 AM Report
You write well and with the right emotions
fused into your poems.
It's what makes it real.
Great write.
Lubs.
Comment By: FreeGlata on March 31, 2006 08:01:25 AM Report
This is love at its greatest, Jody...I loved the sentiment that was so evident in each line.
But you know me and love poetry, lol...I'm a sucker for it!
Hugs and love ya
Glata
Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on March 30, 2006 07:15:09 PM Report
It's lost its baroque quality. It was obviously edited by someone who doesn't get laid much.
Comment By: FreePaul Peter McLean on March 30, 2006 04:57:01 PM Report
This is quite a catalogue of romantic statements. I liked the way you used the occasional rhyme, and alliteration, and the last declaration was the most powerful of all. Great work.
Comment By: FreeCorvus Mellon on March 30, 2006 03:49:20 PM Report
I must say Sorceress, this piece is just as beautiful as it can be. It bespeaks great devotion and passion. What a vision of love and loving. I have just started to write and I hope to some day be half as talented as you are. I think you are the best writer here. Honestly, I have read a great deal of poetry, but none touches me the way yours does.. Keep writing and God bless you and your pen.

Corvus M
Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on March 30, 2006 11:42:04 AM Report
The second half intensifies significantly. Writing tends to lead the mind deeper in the very process. The first part is rather like Elton John's Your Song revisited. The writing in the second part is very fine. The poem could begin with "I cannot encircle the heavens.... if you dispense with the Cyrano bluster. Something a bit clumsy with "Yet hope my devotion will do. Perhaps "Yet hope my devotion sane." Quite sweeping and well-executed. You're on a fantastic rung; I wouldn't raise your voice any higher just yet.
Comment By: PremiumMary Lou Allen on March 29, 2006 08:52:20 PM Report
It just doesn't get any better than this. ML
Comment By: FreeJoe Petro on March 29, 2006 08:41:41 PM Report
This is one of the loveliest poems you have written. Classic form and language that I have come to love. There is a reason you received your recent award and it's evident here. jp
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on March 29, 2006 08:34:43 PM Report
WOW!!...This is beautifully put together, Aces..Just a joy to read. That's what I call unconditional love. I'll differ with you on the master poet part. In my book,you've arrived..Mary Allan Poe couldn't have done any better...
Comment By: TrialAnn on March 29, 2006 08:00:29 PM Report
Very beautiful poem Jody, each and every line lovely.
Comment By: PremiumKeith Overstreet on March 29, 2006 07:59:43 PM Report
A beautiful poem of love. A very lucky man indeed. But he would only let stand at his side as equals not below him or behind him.
I hope you write more love poems. I very much enjoyed this piece.
Keith
Comment By: FreeCeeCee on March 29, 2006 07:29:14 PM Report
Jody,

This was beautiful...I especially liked your lines, "I cannot lasso the moon Or gift you with the stars". Your use of the word gift rather than give tied in the "t" in stars.

Again, very, very nice!

CeeCee (Cari)


Comment By: FreeMichael on March 29, 2006 04:14:13 PM Report
Wonderfully charming and quaint without a hint of mawkishness or the maudlin. A very proper love poem, Lady Jolen! YLM
Comment By: FreeErnestine Northover on March 29, 2006 04:12:01 PM Report
This is a delightful poem, with a lovely flow, and beautiful words. It was a joy to read. Thank you for posting it. Love Ernestine XXX
Comment By: FreeHeike on March 29, 2006 01:01:48 PM Report
Soo romantic, Jody... I liked the pace and sound Who says you are no master poet? They're wrong!
Loved the "lasso the moon" reference to one of my all-time fave movies.
~Heike
Comment By: PremiumMary Lou Allen on March 29, 2006 11:00:23 AM Report
Ah, dear Sorceress, your magnificent poem is worthy of such a great love. ML
Comment By: FreeLinear Z on March 29, 2006 10:48:11 AM Report
Nice reference to the Taj Mahal, posibly the most romantic collection of bricks and plaster in the world :-)
Very sweet sorceress.
Comment By: Freetom on March 29, 2006 08:44:57 AM Report
beautiful dedication to love Jody.
hugs kisses
tom
Comment By: PremiumDavid Turner on March 29, 2006 07:12:25 AM Report
A good contrast of negatives and positives in the declaration of love Jolen - it is always the little things that matter most I think.
Lucky man whherever he is.

David
Comment By: ModeratorHenry M. on March 29, 2006 06:45:56 AM Report
wow, love and devotion abounds in these words! Your passion is very evident here Jody, great write! Henry




 


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