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Author Name: FreeSensual Sorceress 45 Comments
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My Sky



There is a movement of spirit
when the sky becomes an ocean;
depths infused with inky hues,
laden with a weight of color
that span the spectrum of blues.
The air is charged and surges
through all that lie within its path.
Currents alternately flow and ebb
in heavens, dark and vast.
Seams split; nightís arms open wide
for lashes from its mysterious master,
to whose will it readily complied.

There is a settling of peace,
sediment from the storm,
where reflection is forever altered
from what had been its norm.
The awareness of minute details,
your diminutive status within
seeps through the memory of man;
An understanding,
pre-dating the oldest Celtic clan.
There is a need to be connected
within this desire to let go;
to surrender to the forces
that balance beyond control.

Author's Notes:
 I wrote this poem after Ross McCague made me think too much.
 

 
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Comments:
Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on December 26, 2007 06:51:20 PM Report
Jolen,
How in the world did I ever miss this??? The sky is my favorite place.... as well as the rest of nature... One of your very best... Gold  medals are so deserving...
 Hug s~ She Whispers

Comment By: FreePaul Peter McLean on November 5, 2007 04:32:35 PM Report
Lovely work, Jolen. Your images are clearly painted, and I can see that sky in my head as I read. I particularly like the last three lines of the first verse. The FP award is richly deserved, as always with your work.
Comment By: FreeRobin Constantinou on June 29, 2007 09:36:54 AM Report
woah, love the picture, and the poem fits so well, so dangerous yet eye catchingly beautiful, well done

Comment By: FreeCandice on May 17, 2007 04:39:38 PM Report





excellent write


Comment By: FreeRin Marie on April 30, 2007 12:16:14 PM Report
Very Nice, Congratulations on the Award.

 

Love, Rin

Comment By: PremiumDavid Turner on February 9, 2007 05:48:43 AM Report
Congratulations on yet another Award Jolen - when are you going for the photography award?

 

David

Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on February 8, 2007 11:02:05 PM Report
I can see I have something to do with this. Hmmm... Very fine work.
Comment By: FreeDori on February 6, 2007 09:19:42 AM Report
When the sky becomes an ocean - this is a great line.  I've never thought of it that way, but it rather is like an ocean in a storm.  Beautiful poem, I'm glad I read it.
Comment By: TrialAnn on February 5, 2007 08:33:55 PM Report
Congratulations! Nice work.


Comment By: FreeRoger Bacon on February 5, 2007 02:18:30 PM Report

Congrats on your poem!  Yes, the sky can hold many things for us.


Comment By: FreeLinear Z on February 5, 2007 02:16:19 PM Report
LOL, that is a fantastic reason for writing a beautiful poem!

Both halves of this poem work wonderfully; the first is very focused
and poetic, just flowing through my brain as I read it. the second half
is very thoughtful, and thought provoking. A great acheivement.

Congratulations on the featured poem award, very deserving.

Be well, Linear.




Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on February 4, 2007 06:23:27 PM Report

Ms Sensual:  Congratulations on your Feature Poem Award.  I especially love the last lines.  Great write........


Lady D


 


Comment By: FreeAdri on February 4, 2007 06:23:22 PM Report
I loved this from the start, you know that.  Congrats my J. 
Adri x

Comment By: FreeRon Miller on January 24, 2007 09:54:23 PM Report
Doesn't get much deeper than that! What a great work here. Thought provoking,

and visual. Loved it. "There is a need to be connected within a desire to let go..."

Great poem.

Ron

Comment By: PremiumPaul on January 11, 2007 10:18:04 PM Report
Superb Imagery But then of course you wrote it so that goes with out say I really enjoyed this -the images emoted a great euphoric, manic-like feeling!

 

PS - I hate it when I think too much it brings on a headache - lol

 

Paul 

Comment By: FreeRoger on January 10, 2007 12:30:21 AM Report
Wow, this emotes a feeling of excitement and freedom!  I was content on being lost in this storm.  Wonderful write, dear.
Comment By: FreeJames Thomas Whitworth on January 7, 2007 07:30:38 PM Report
Talented piece? I am the only one who gets to call jolen that.

 

There is a need to be connected
within a desire to let go
and surrender to the forces
that maintain balance beyond control.

How do you do that? How do you find such connections in such opposites? I do not believe that I have read such an apposite reflection since Mr. Toots declared his state of mind to be "exactly as if Burgess and Co. wished to oblige a customer with a most extraordinary pair of trousers, and could not cut out what they had in their minds."
You have a certain knack for seeing such inherent human truths, just as in 'Fathoms', you noted "A perceived need to believe was stronger than the desire to become". It takes a special kind of vision to see such things. Most people, being quite content to live out their existence in ignorance, neither notice, care to see, nor even know of the presence of such psychological traits even though we all possess them. You verbalise them though, seemingly with an ease foreign to others.

Of course she does, she's a witch, you idiot!

Comment By: FreeSamuel E. Stone on January 7, 2007 06:49:23 PM Report
I'm very impressed...a very talented piece.....I found this poem to be really good...entertaining, mystical, with scenic beauty...Well done...

Sam

Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on January 7, 2007 02:31:47 PM Report
The last nine lines are breathtaking. Luminism revisited.
Comment By: PremiumDavid Turner on January 5, 2007 06:28:29 PM Report
Yes, nature controls us - we do not control it, thinking otherwise is sheer hubris and will lead to our nemesis. You express this idea wonderfully.

 

David

Comment By: FreeAngel on January 5, 2007 04:27:39 PM Report
Excellent write as always

 

Love Angelxx

Comment By: FreeLast Temple Knight on January 5, 2007 02:28:29 PM Report
The sky is so immense, one can't help but contemplate their place in the world's balance of nature...  very thought-provoking and moving!
Comment By: FreeRobert Smith on July 3, 2006 03:42:49 PM Report
Energy - some say that the life we lead can be viewed with reflection as a storm - pensive waiting with flashes of brilliance a bit like reading your work J - Great poem

 

Rob

Comment By: Freetasmia on July 3, 2006 01:38:11 AM Report
Wow !! This was an amazing portrayal...beautiful in its vividness!
Comment By: FreePelagic Mind on June 26, 2006 03:10:14 AM Report
I like the picture but your verse is better at making the reader "feel" the connection with the storm. I love Storms, of a natural nature of course. I listened to a professor giving a talk about the sea recently and taking in to consideration the density of seawater to air, a large wave hitting the coast has the same destructive power as a 900 mile per hour wind! Crashing waves and lashing rain, hahahahaha can be beautiful....

 

Good piece....

Comment By: FreeSharon Jorcil James on June 24, 2006 09:21:05 PM Report
The poem compliments the picture perfectly.

A lovely and detailed description about one of the forces or Nature.

 

Sharon JJ

Comment By: FreeJeff on June 21, 2006 11:14:00 AM Report
Great write, loved the picture.

It brough the poem to new heights.

 

Jeff

Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on June 21, 2006 12:57:24 AM Report
This picture has been our sky here the past two days, awesome shot and an incredible write Jody, Joe
Comment By: FreeDarkness Rides This Night on June 20, 2006 08:15:19 PM Report
Whoa..! I love lightning.. !Thunder storms rolling in and the rain as it gives drink to to parched earth..! I can feel your words in my soul as the picture brings thunder to my eyes and ears..! Excellent write my frind.. !
Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on June 20, 2006 05:23:35 PM Report
WOW OH WOW!!!

What a sky!!! what a poem!!

How I adore storms. They make me feel so alive.

Ali x

Comment By: FreeAngel on June 20, 2006 03:44:48 PM Report
Wow this is so beautiful. Amazing pic

 

Love Angelxx

Comment By: FreeChuck on June 20, 2006 11:29:47 AM Report

When you are here, you are perfection, and Iím sure it came so easily there... itís an amazingly fantastic poemÖ 


Comment By: FreeConjugatingWizard on June 20, 2006 10:22:36 AM Report
Very beautiful poem I love thunderstorms and walking in them when it's raining out
Comment By: FreeWide Awake on June 20, 2006 09:26:36 AM Report
What a beautiful and powerful presentation of both faces ...of....nature~
You know I have a penchant for this dualistic inherency...and you have done it such great justice upon this rivetting canvas...
Wonderful Ms.Sorceress~

Best wishes,
Pamela

Comment By: FreeGlata on June 20, 2006 07:23:29 AM Report

Jody...you never cease to amaze me! This picture and write are so perfect together...I believe that everything in this universe is connected, in some way, by that same "energy"...


Awesome job, girl!


Big hugs from NC...Glata


Comment By: FreeJoe Petro on June 20, 2006 04:50:02 AM Report
Jolen, I read this several times and derived a few meanings, but what sticks with me is that we are all energy and connected by it. The same energy from the beginning of time. jp
Comment By: FreeGraham Jones on June 20, 2006 04:11:52 AM Report
The picture and poem work in perfect harmony, you have captured that vastness that makes us look so small by comparison.
Comment By: FreeAdri on June 20, 2006 03:56:23 AM Report

J, this is beyond believe.  This is one of those pieces that leave you speechless... 
This is a perfect example of our total brilliance and versatility.  This poem is a gentle piece of art.  I said it once, and Iím saying it again; you do with words what Picasso did with paint...
I love this J.  Brilliant!
Adri x


 


Comment By: Freetom on June 19, 2006 11:35:30 PM Report
Great picture Jody I remember those lighting storms excellent penning I just love storms seeing the white and blue flashes hearing the thunder explode.

hugs kisses

tom

Comment By: FreeThe Mystic Poet on June 19, 2006 11:12:02 PM Report
I just love this! thanks for giving me a preveiw! I know it didn't hurt that you thought too much, if you came up with this.
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on June 19, 2006 10:08:08 PM Report
PS...You live in the sky?????
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on June 19, 2006 10:07:28 PM Report
oooohhhh, You get some fireworks in your neck of the woods, huh?...Beautiful picture...The write is just as beautiful.I loved the ending,...maintaining a balance beyond control says it all..The power and the glory od nature's handiwork is inspiring... I liked the way you mixed ryming with free verse..It drove my college creative writing instructor nuts when I did that..:O)...Yereverlovinsparky
Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on June 19, 2006 10:06:07 PM Report
This is exactly what I was talking about. Sometimes it might just be a single image or tone. It isn't always the whole hog. I think that reference might be indigenous as well. I could read this poem many times over a period of weeks and still enjoy it. It has that 'expert' feel about it.

I hope you enjoy doing that kind of thing. I think it's a strength as you know. That way your soul will never experience a terrible theft or your boyfriend linger in other people's time.

Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on June 19, 2006 09:41:38 PM Report
Jody, the sky is endless and so full of excitement with changing colors of day and night..so vivid you sketch this poem with this picture..it is just awesome dark lady.. love your poems..
Hugs ~ She

Comment By: PremiumMary Lou Allen on June 19, 2006 09:38:16 PM Report
Great work, Jolen.  This is exciting stuff.  Yes, we do feel small when considering the vastness of your sky.  (I'm willing to let you have the sky, but the stars belong to me. )  I'm tagging this as a favorite.  I love it.  ML




 


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