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Author Name: FreeSensual Sorceress 37 Comments
Date Added: February 11, 2007 22:02:38 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Fathoms

My youthful days rolled by as the tides.
Rising and falling in a churlish
pattern that, while I may not have been
able to fathom, held a singular purpose.
A gadarene cadence of living,
loving, longing and loss.
A perceived need to believe was
stronger than the desire to become,
and I, like the tide…washed out to sea.

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Comment By: FreePaul Peter McLean on June 29, 2011 09:41:33 PM Report
Very good work Jolen. I love "gadarene"; I haven't read that word for years, and the use of it in that context shows great imagination and facility with the language. I would add the word "them" after fathom though, since "fathom" isn't used intransitively in this context. I love how you keep the sea motif flowing throughout the work too. Well done.
Comment By: FreeS on April 5, 2007 02:52:47 PM Report
is anything you write not worthy of an award?

haha

best -

shoaib

Comment By: FreeSamuel E. Stone on March 20, 2007 10:42:26 AM Report
Very deep and profound written with grace and style... Hope all is well in Merry Ole England...wishing you well... Sam...
Comment By: FreeRoger on February 16, 2007 07:06:06 PM Report
Such a doleful write, Jolen.  Very worthy of this award.  Congratulations.
Comment By: FreeSilkinTears on February 14, 2007 01:04:18 PM Report
Beautiful as always Jolen.
Helen

Comment By: Freeb doneff on February 12, 2007 06:04:46 PM Report
Reading something like this, reminds me of why I try so hard to write...my god, beautiful..
I will read this over and over..I love you, and congrats sweetheart..
ps, will you be mine? lol..
BB

Comment By: PremiumBlake Hightdudis on February 11, 2007 11:33:27 PM Report
A beautiful wonderful piece of work, I reall enjoyed it, Congratulations on your award.
Comment By: PremiumBlake Hightdudis on February 11, 2007 11:31:40 PM Report
A beautiful wonderful piece of work, I reall enjoyed it, Congratulations on your award.
Comment By: FreeCindy Bendel on December 21, 2006 05:29:29 AM Report
Amazing work from a most amazing poet. Just... simply.... awesome!

~Cindy

Comment By: FreeDori on December 19, 2006 08:51:10 AM Report
A gadarene cadence of living,
loving, longing and loss.

 

The whole poem is beautiful, but I rarely see alliteration anymore.  I was so stunned and happy to see this, I had to start the poem over from distraction!  This is a poem that makes me wish I had written it.  I don't know how else to say it. 

Comment By: FreeHeike on December 18, 2006 04:19:06 PM Report
Now that's what I call a scoop!
Jody, your insight and eloquence are unique :-).
A new beginning indeed.
~Heike, who also had to look up the word...

Comment By: PremiumPaul on December 18, 2006 07:58:16 AM Report
Simply Beautiful - Congrats

Paul

Comment By: FreeCynthia Jones on December 18, 2006 07:58:14 AM Report
Jody, congrats on your muchly deserved award. :o) *S* Whispering Winds
Comment By: PremiumRobertM on December 18, 2006 02:33:27 AM Report
I totally relate to this, only I haven't been able to say as succinctly as you. Nice job and congratulations.  RM.
Comment By: FreeAdri on December 18, 2006 01:47:16 AM Report
Oh congrats my J!!!!  So wonderful!!!  I love this one.
Adri x

Comment By: TrialAnn on December 17, 2006 08:06:52 PM Report
Congratulations Jolen! Beautiful work.


Comment By: FreeAngelique on December 17, 2006 07:57:50 PM Report
Congratulations! Well deserved as always. This is a beautiful write. I love the term you use "cadence of living" and the whole theme and language of this is very enjoyable.
Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on December 17, 2006 07:54:57 PM Report
Congratulations on your Feature Poem Award -- very deserved !!!

 

Lady D

Comment By: FreeJames Thomas Whitworth on December 17, 2006 07:51:02 PM Report
I am so proud of you, princess. How many could pull out something like this in but a few minutes? A lot of people pride themselves on being able to see others so clearly, but there are not too many people who know themselves well enough to be able to cut to their own core so directly.

Love,
James.

Comment By: FreeGoliath Assassin on October 20, 2006 08:59:33 PM Report
Wow!  I loved this!  I do look back the same way you have and realize that chapters of my life had a hidden purpose.  The desire to become is much more important than we often realize.  You cannot "be" anything, without first "becoming."  In life, we must "act ourselves into a state of thinking."
Comment By: FreeSharon Jorcil James on October 20, 2006 08:09:48 PM Report
This has got to be one of your best pieces by far!!

An instant favourite Jody......so good it is.

 

Sharon JJ

Comment By: FreePelagic Mind on October 6, 2006 05:19:11 AM Report
I had to look up "gadarene" but now think this is one of your best pieces... I loved it... 
Comment By: FreeJames Thomas Whitworth on October 1, 2006 03:08:16 AM Report
Hey, princess.

You know, I think a lot of people are misunderstanding this one and taking that final line to be a negative thing. Which, actually, is a testament to your ability to layer your work and to tie together such different, and sometimes seemingly opposite meanings/ideas.

These last three lines  I read this way:

The 'I' of the final line is the 'I' with the 'need to believe' rather than the 'I' who has the 'desire to become'. Since the need was stronger than the desire and taking it that you would rather be the latter of the two, then the tide washing you away is nothing but a regeneration of sorts. It is not, as everyone seems to see it, an end, but in fact a new beginning.

Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on September 30, 2006 05:05:17 PM Report
Intensely deep and one that needs or deserves to be read many times so taking it into favs

 

ali x

Comment By: FreeJoe Petro on September 30, 2006 05:07:06 AM Report
Dynamic poetry Jody. The word gadarene is exquisite. Adds credence to the overall intent of the poem. jp
Comment By: Freetom on September 28, 2006 04:03:14 AM Report
exquisite and inspiratioal penning Jody simply beautiful

hugs kisses

tom

Comment By: FreeDevilish Minx on September 28, 2006 02:52:25 AM Report
hmm kind of reminds me of the song The Tide by Neurosis, highly doubt that you've ever listened to it, lol but I completely love this i love how you brought your begining and end together so well with "and I, like the tide...washed out to sea" love this my dear

Laura

Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on September 27, 2006 10:04:57 PM Report
The action of  triplets runs from fairy tales to the Bible. I love the motion of threes and it casts a spell here in the noun phrases and the clauses. You have a self-revelatory dimension to this work which is stunning and intriguing for those who know  and those who fear you. You're the beast and it's coming out of the sea:

Heaven blazing in my head
I dreamt a monsterous dream
Something came up

Out of the sea
Swept through the land of
The rich and the free.

 

Where did you get 'gadarene'? A satellite or NASA.

Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on September 26, 2006 05:58:48 PM Report
Such is life Sorceress....

 

What sometimes gets washed out to see,
is missed but comes back to you and me.
They come back to us as some other form,
a person, a beast, a tree or a thunder storm.
We know that that are never to far away,
and that we will see them again some day.

I love this Jody, thought provoking and a terrific write, Joe

Comment By: FreeAngel on September 26, 2006 03:33:16 PM Report
No matter what life throws at you Jody or how many times the waves try to drag you down you will bounce right back up and smile. Beautiful write

 

Love Angelxx

Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on September 26, 2006 12:36:27 PM Report
Miss Sorceress:  now that feels true to Life!!!   Good write....I got a lot from this post.

 

Lady D

Comment By: PremiumCharles C. Griggs on September 26, 2006 08:35:31 AM Report





You are to wonderful to be washed out to sea-    outstanding write


Comment By: FreeGlata on September 26, 2006 08:06:31 AM Report
Riding those same waves, sis...And this is beautiful. "Fathoms," indeed....Wish I could be a million miles from shore, riding these waves under a dark sky with a full moon above!

Hugs and love ya!

Glata

Comment By: ModeratorHenry M. on September 26, 2006 06:29:09 AM Report
This is just brilliant writing Jody... Putting others before yourself is a most unselfish act, in the end it is you who pays the price. Loved the comparisons here Jody.    Henry
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on September 26, 2006 02:15:06 AM Report
Yer gettin' in deed, I mean deep waters here, darlin''...{pun intended}..

"A perceived need to believe was
stronger than the desire to become"... I love that line!..

To me, that means our need to  be part of what we see in the herd prevents us from growing inour own way. I don't know if that's what you meant, but that's what I took away from it..Happy to see you writing in your usual style again, Aces..:O)..I'm glad I didn't know you were this smart when I was first getting to know you. You might have scared me off..Too late now..yer stuck with me..Love you...yereverstillimpressedfurball

Comment By: FreeAdri on September 26, 2006 01:35:56 AM Report
This is beautiful my J...  really heartfelt and true.  We ae all like the tide's of the sea...  we wash out to see, and then to shore again.  I like this.
Adri x

Comment By: FreeThe Mystic Poet on September 26, 2006 12:24:10 AM Report

You're youthful day's rolled by.......past tense? I wasnt aware they'd past you by. Wonderful jolen!






 


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