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Author Name: FreeSensual Sorceress 55 Comments
Date Added: February 11, 2007 08:02:00 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Midnight Orchids
Part I
 
Gray clouds of doom descended on my heart,
Blanketing darkness, sinister and stark.
Lost and disheartened, lonely and listless;
Tossed and tormented by cruel tomorrow,
Drowning in black oceans, ache and sorrow.
In resignation, I surrendered hope.
Tumultuous moments, I learned to rue,
Fragmented memories, similar view.
A recurring theme dictated my dreams.
This endless nightmare, simply predestined
To produce one answer, countless questions.
Fugitive from joy and life's mysteries.
Midnight orchids withered, desolate, died:
Fragile innocence then martyred by time.
 
 
Part II
 
Devouring the gray, a silver lining.
Love's fiery torch, the dark days igniting,
With a nova to scorch the endless night.
Sweet breezes appeased my discontent brow,
Redeemed by a trust in one solemn vow.
Cleanse me in baptismal rite of passage.
Grant me the strength to finally ascend
From dire depths, I will not sink to again.
All riches one may miserly accrue
Are pale and drab beside your vibrant hue.
I can face hell's fires and adversity,
With my beloved serendipity.
Midnight orchids bear rainbow's youthful bloom,
Fragile innocence, forever renewed.
 
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Props going out to James Whitworth and Ross McCague for edit suggestions.

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Comments:
Comment By: FreeRobin Constantinou on July 24, 2007 06:33:43 PM Report
wow breathtaking, stunning in fact i haven't read your work in so long, beautiful and powerful, well done on the award. deservant indeed,
~Robin

Comment By: FreeRobert Smith on May 21, 2007 09:43:19 AM Report
Serendipity indeed - fantastic weave of powerful words, how I have missed your work - spell bound as always - Rob
Comment By: PremiumBlake Hightdudis on February 12, 2007 04:55:36 PM Report
Wow one wonderful, beautiful, descriptive write.  to see how wonderful you write now

is so much better than in 2004, truely amazing.

Comment By: FreeGoliath Assassin on February 3, 2007 03:30:30 AM Report
I liked the Martyr theme.  I'm actually considering that theme for future writes myself.  I was surprised to see words like "martyr" and "baptised."  It speaks to the discontented Catholic youth within me.
Comment By: FreeEli D. on January 19, 2007 06:22:55 PM Report
The gentle rhyme, complemented by the varied diction, all filling up a wonderful message that paints serene dreams of the ideas presented, this poem was awesome. Definitely a wonder. Most excellent and beyond worthy of award! Congratulations! -Eli D.
Comment By: FreeMujtaba H Zaidi on January 17, 2007 11:01:17 AM Report
Wow....It is so deep and amazing that i would love to read it hundred times at least....Your work surely deserved the award...Moreover, Happy New Year to you and family!
Comment By: FreeSamuel E. Stone on January 16, 2007 06:35:31 PM Report
Jolen,

I can see why you won the award...this poem is very deserving...it flows with style and grace and is a pleasure to read and ponder...Execllently done...

Sam

Comment By: FreeRoger on January 10, 2007 12:37:57 AM Report
Simpy fantastic!  Nothing else could be said, but congratulations! 
Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on December 29, 2006 11:20:12 AM Report
Ms Sorceress:  WOW!!!  congratulations on your Feature Poem Award...

 

Lady D

Comment By: FreeGay Johnson on December 28, 2006 08:56:18 PM Report
OH Jolen. My god how you have touched my heart..again and again. This
write is so deserving of the award. Simply outstading. I can so relate.

Hugs and kisses from me to you, Gay




Comment By: PremiumRobertM on December 28, 2006 07:05:11 PM Report
Funny, isn't it, how the common expression is to "fall in love". Seems to me, one rises in love after having fallen into despair. Definitely a two-part behavior of the heart. Nicely told here.  RM.
Comment By: PremiumDavid Turner on December 28, 2006 05:16:13 PM Report
Congratulations on the Award Jolen - Long may you continue to bloom and grow.

 

Warm Wishes

 

David

Comment By: FreeMoon Fairy on December 28, 2006 10:53:25 AM Report

Simply breathtaking Ms.S~
A stunning write! Have a terrific
New Year~
Hugs,
~Tracie


Comment By: FreeJoe Petro on December 28, 2006 05:03:03 AM Report
I guess you'd be called a wordsmith. Congratulations on a very worthy write. jp
Comment By: FreeCynthia Jones on December 27, 2006 06:57:05 PM Report
Congrats on your muchly deserved award. *S* Whispering Winds
Comment By: FreeLady Literary on December 26, 2006 11:51:57 PM Report
How beautifully your words flow. I have been away for a little while and yours was the first I read when I came "home."  I'm glad. I am also glad that this took a gold.

Congrats and hugs

Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on December 26, 2006 11:48:38 PM Report
I commented below Jody, now, once again, I have to say congrats on the award. Just an incredible write, Joe
Comment By: FreeRoger Bacon on December 26, 2006 07:31:35 PM Report

Congrats on another fine poem.  The orchids worked well for you in this. 


Comment By: FreeMichelle on December 26, 2006 07:18:01 PM Report
beautiful, going into my favs!
Comment By: FreeDori on December 26, 2006 11:38:06 AM Report
I love your poetry because I can read it once and enjoy the feel, the alliteration, the rhythm.  And then I can read it again and again to dissect it, layer by layer. 
Comment By: FreeAdri on December 26, 2006 08:49:58 AM Report
From the start this was a winner...  Congrats my J...  You are BRILLIANT!!!  Rub off on me please...  lol 
Love ya
Adri x

Comment By: FreeHeike on December 25, 2006 06:35:28 AM Report
Congratulations, J, for winning with this masterpiece.
Happy Holidays :-),
~Heike
Comment By: PremiumPaul on December 25, 2006 12:08:26 AM Report

I read this last night and got side tracked before I got to write a comment. I love this especially the alliteration as exemplified in the 3rd line of part one and the assonance as exemplified in the 4th and 5th line of part one.


 


Great Job and Congratulations

Paul

Comment By: TrialAnn on December 24, 2006 10:39:26 PM Report
Beautiful job and congratulations sister!


Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on December 24, 2006 08:04:49 PM Report
She got a hubcap for this. I want in on the action.

That's an entirely inappropriate comment, most ungracious and lacking a certain elan.

And to think it's Xmas and he's begging for it.

I'll deal with him, Martha.

No, not that. It's his pathology.

It's not his astrology. He's just being stubborn.

We brought him up right, too.

Oh, dear, there's a naked guy just below us.

Let's leave. Most unwholesome den of iniquity.

Oh dear, I just filled in that blank. Disgusting!

Just don't look at him. He's a heathen.

They're my friends and ________ off.

 

Comment By: FreeJames Thomas Whitworth on December 24, 2006 07:49:53 PM Report
You _______ poet you!
Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on December 23, 2006 03:50:16 PM Report
Don't usually read comments before responding..

Like the poem but somewhat put off by the many comments by Ross which I feel are better placed out of sight?

 

 

Ali x

Comment By: FreeFLETCHER on December 23, 2006 08:39:56 AM Report
Your Poetry is simply amazing. Talent flows from you like a rivers of inspired thoughts. A gift such as yours is so rare! You hold the fire within your spirit to amaze and to fascinate the reader. You are indeed a Master. Thank you Sorceress for sharing with us.
Fletch

Comment By: FreePamela A. Lamppa on December 15, 2006 09:16:39 PM Report
Simply beautiful. ~Pam :o)
Comment By: FreeLinear Z on December 15, 2006 07:23:48 PM Report
Hope, love and the deepest darkness of our own spirit. As usuall you
have crafted your chosen subject into perfection. A beautiful poem.

To redemption and strength


Comment By: FreeAngel on December 12, 2006 10:56:14 AM Report
Magnificent queen of poetry

 

Love Angelxx

Comment By: FreeDarkness Rides This Night on December 11, 2006 01:58:43 AM Report
To each love comes a winter. But if the orchid can learn to heal and to cling to the rock. Hope springs eternal. A most beautiful poem my dear Jody..! May your orchids forever bare the rainbow bloom..!
Comment By: PremiumDavid Turner on December 10, 2006 07:09:32 AM Report
Think I had better go and do some more gardening, and take my torch!-)

 

David

Comment By: FreeRichard Michael Cronin on December 9, 2006 11:26:00 AM Report
Another blockbuster....wow! Oh ye of golden pen!
Comment By: FreeCeeCee on December 9, 2006 10:33:20 AM Report
Beautiful use of language and expression, Jody...your writing is always a pleasure to read.

 

Cari

 

Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on December 8, 2006 10:14:13 PM Report
No problem. Mull it over and then decide if you want some of it back or you want to do something else. Fine poem indeed. I even made comparison to Lawrence.
Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on December 8, 2006 10:07:44 PM Report
 
Midnight Orchids

 

Part I


Gray clouds of doom descended upon my heart
Blanketing me in darkness, sinister and stark.
I was lost and disheartened, lonely and listless,
Tossed and tormented by every cruel tomorrow,
Drowning in black oceans of ache and sorrow.
In resignation, I surrendered hope--In
Tumultuous moments, I learned to rue,
Fragmented memories of similar view. 
A recurring theme dictates my dreams.
This endless nightmare, simply predestined
To produce a single answer, countless questions.
Distanced from life's joys and mystery,
Midnight orchids wither and die,
Fragile innocence martyred by time.

Part II
 

A silver lining devoured the gray.
Love's torch, ignited dark days,
With a nova to scorch the night.
Sweet breezes appease my brow,
Redeemed by trust; a solemn vow.
This baptismal rite of passage
Grant me strength to finally ascend
From dire depths, I'll never sink to again.
All worldly riches one might miserly accrue
Are pale and drab beside your vibrant hue.
I can face hell's fires and any adversity,
With you, my beloved serendipity.
Midnight orchids bear rainbow's bloom,
Fragile innocence, radiantly renewed.

Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on December 8, 2006 09:54:49 PM Report
I might even take the 'their' out of the final lines of each stanza. I'm just trying to make the symbol as potent as possible.
Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on December 8, 2006 09:51:51 PM Report
In case someone doesn't understand. By taking out the possessive it gives the illusion that the poem is about orchids or the individual shares the nature of the orchids to an infinite degree rather than just having them in their possession as a casual symbol of the situation. The present tense lends more urgency and makes the statement factual rather than merely a report of a past event. Am I wrong?
Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on December 8, 2006 09:47:28 PM Report
Edit:

 

First stanza: (no possessive/present tense in first line)

Midnight orchids wither and die,
Their fragile innocence martyred by time.

 

Second stanza: (no possessive/apostrophe)

Midnight orchids bear rainbow's bloom,
Their fragile innocence, radiantly renewed
.

 

Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on December 8, 2006 08:51:21 PM Report
Both sides of the coin! Incredible write Sorceress, I love the imagery, Joe
Comment By: FreeHeike on December 8, 2006 07:55:22 PM Report
The fairest of the flowers is as sensitive to pain as to bliss.
I'm so glad that the latter prevailed.
Magnificent work, J!
~Heike

Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on December 8, 2006 07:02:36 PM Report
Mysterious lovely Lady who wore a dark velvet cloak
and had lived in the night shadows of scattered dreams.

Now her heart is spun golden silk  with the dawning light
of his presence with hope and love forever it seems 

Wishing you so much to live and love... Hugs ~ She Whispers

Comment By: FreeWide Awake on December 8, 2006 06:42:41 PM Report
OMG!

..........

Just as your poetry Ms.Sorceress...

This is mastery...utterly and simply...poetic mastery...JUST GORGEOUS~

Tumultuous moments, I learned to rue,
Fragmented memories of similar view. 


Hugs,
Little Fox~

Comment By: Freeleroy taylor fiddler lyon on December 8, 2006 03:52:31 PM Report
awesome


Comment By: FreeRebeca Weiss on December 8, 2006 02:36:29 PM Report
Absolutely beautiful!  On what has been such a gray day, you lift my spirit!

~Beca :0)

Comment By: FreeThe Mystic Poet on December 8, 2006 02:02:21 PM Report
I really like this one, you really out done yourself.
Comment By: FreeLast Temple Knight on December 8, 2006 11:37:39 AM Report
Through even the darkest of times delicate flowers bloom...

Beautiful! ~ Joe

Comment By: FreeGlata on December 8, 2006 10:49:39 AM Report
Absolutely stunning! I love your gift of words that you give to us. Such an ability to make me see exactly what you are saying and the feelings that lay underneath...

Gorgeous work, my beautiful friend!

Hugs...

Glata

Comment By: PremiumMelanie on December 8, 2006 07:56:49 AM Report
Wish I had your green thumb.(among other things)

This is beautiful !

Melanie




Comment By: FreeRandy Harrison on December 8, 2006 07:28:19 AM Report
Miss S, what an awesome piece. Your skillful use of symbolism throughout is breath-taking. The meter is perfect to take us on the journey to dark depths and then into beautiful renewal. And probably the best use of "serendipity" since Ben Franklin. Love it,

Randy

Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on December 8, 2006 06:50:33 AM Report
You string theem words together real purdy-like, Aces..You astound me with your versitility and talent, darlin.....This is just a stunning work of art..yereverimpressedfurball
Comment By: FreeAdri on December 8, 2006 06:08:03 AM Report

“If your brilliance can be bottled, can have a two liters delivered to my house, daily please.  My address is…” 
Wow, I can’t really say more…  This is beautiful, brilliant and just out of this world. 
Definitely up there with you best work… 
Love,
Juicy Girl x


Comment By: FreeHenry M. on December 8, 2006 05:57:12 AM Report
It is so amazing how love can lift you to the heights. Equally amazing is this poem Jody, you never fail to amaze me with your expressiveness!      Henry
Comment By: FreeJames Thomas Whitworth on December 8, 2006 05:06:22 AM Report
 

Fragile innocence martyred by time

 

That, right there, princess, in one of the best lines that I have read on this site or anywhere. The use of the word 'martyred' as opposed to simply 'killed' or destroyed tells of a reason for which the orchids must wither. Their withering is necessary for the renewal. Much as in life, we have various obstacles and circumstances to overcome until we find that which makes our being here worthwhile - so the martyrdom of the orchids is very much a symbol of our own strength and the sacrifices that we make. And, as if the use of 'martyred' was not enough, you then introduce the "baptismal rite of passage" to complete the renewal/rebirth. The granting of strength which follows is an added extra to the martyr theme, giving the reader, or this one at least, the image of the saints ascending to Heaven.

You never cease to amaze me, my dear, with your constant source of inspiration and your knack for hitting upon a single line around which you are able to construct beauty, sadness, poignancy or joy.

Love
James





 


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