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Author Name: FreexHannahx 24 Comments
Date Added: December 30, 2006 12:12:19 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Smile of a Soldier

It seems God never raised the sun from the ground,
Instead the shadows blackened on everything around.
Curtains shut tight, throwing the light into the dark.
Long ago, a household once so alive lost it's spark.
The flowers all drowned from a flood of grief,
This family never got a chance to a sigh of relief.
By three simple words, they were all left broken hearted,
Killed in action. A husband and father now departed.
His son sits down and cries out a prayer,
Hoping his father will hear from up there.

"Please Father, oh please just come home.
You're making mother cry leaving her alone.
Sister won't even leave the comfort of her room.
The whole house seems to be covered by a dark gloom.
So please come back and show us that you're still here,
Light our path with your love and take away our fear.
Come home Dad - I miss you..."

He lay his head down on the pillow to sleep for the night,
But before he closed his eyes there was a blinding light.
A figure stepped forward with a smile on his face.
That smile was his father's - one nothing could replace.

A voice shattered the silence,
"Well done my Son,
You've got so far - just look at what you've done.
I can't stay too long for heaven's calling me back,
But I came to give a father's blessing that you lack.
There is so much i want to say, but I have very little time,
When you need guidance and life seems too great a climb,
Just call out to me and I'll take you firmly by the hand.
I'll help you fly over those mountains and all the land.
I was never a very good Father, and that I can admit.
But this family has always stuck together - never quit.
You  loved me even when I had been gone for so long,
I'd write to you and you'd write to me - love was always strong.
But now I've gone and this is our final goodbye.
I will always be with this family so please don't cry.
They call to me son, and I can't hold back no more,
Now for the greatest journey we'll all make for sure."

The light started to fade out until there was nothing to be seen.
Instead a single whtie feather lay where his father had been.
He picked it up and in his hand he'd keep it everyday.
"I'm so sorry son"  whispered a voice from far away...


 

Author's Notes:
Finished on the 30/12/06
 
A true story to so many out there.
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Comments:
Comment By: Freesaeed davoudi on October 24, 2011 07:57:22 AM Report
so beautifull.......
Comment By: FreeAndrew on January 20, 2010 04:19:24 PM Report
as a retired member of the armed services, i am truly touched by your affinity for the unique challenges that face young men and women in uniform and more importantly, their families.  keep shining that light, even if it starts to fade.  masterful work which touched me on multiple levels - richly deserving of this award.
Comment By: Freecolton on September 15, 2009 04:24:25 PM Report
this was really good i like A voice shattered the silence,
Comment By: Freejess on July 31, 2008 05:39:00 PM Report
This poem gave me goosebumps....

This is an absolutely wonderful piece and emotional....

I've just returned from four TODs in Iraq and this moved me to tears....

CONGRATS ON THE AWARD! Although late....it's well deserving of it....

Comment By: FreeTimespell on September 3, 2007 09:45:34 AM Report
That really was a compelling write,
Congratulations on your award, you truly deserved it!

All the best

:o)

~T.S~

Comment By: FreeRin Marie on July 31, 2007 05:43:45 PM Report
This is just so beautiful.  I know families ripped apart by this stupid war, spouses praying that we come home safe and greeting the mailman to see if there is news... its all so sad.

 

Great Write, Congratulations on the award.

Love, Rin

Comment By: FreeRobin Constantinou on July 1, 2007 12:54:45 PM Report
wow just wow, and also well done on the award well deserved bravo

Comment By: Premiumjohn j. carey on June 22, 2007 06:16:32 AM Report
great poem. congratulations on this award,john
Comment By: FreeAntony Frank on June 15, 2007 12:15:59 PM Report
Beautiful poem.  Deserves the award.

 

Antony x.

Comment By: FreeAntony Frank on June 15, 2007 12:06:48 PM Report
Beautiful poem.  Deserves the award.

 

Antony x.

Comment By: FreeS on June 8, 2007 09:14:02 AM Report
great poem kiddo
Comment By: FreeNicholas Ryan on May 17, 2007 02:21:37 PM Report
very nice job

 

 

Outstanding write Hannah.

Comment By: PremiumDavid Turner on February 14, 2007 09:33:06 AM Report
Hi Hannah - if it is Hannah - good that you remind us of the reality of this terrible war and the grief stricken stories behind each statistic.

I suspect that this is probably due to difference in American and English idiom but I was a bit puzzled by the ending. Here a white feather is a symbol of cowardice so it seemed strange for the poem to end like that.

 

Warm Wishes

 

David

Comment By: FreeNichole on February 14, 2007 01:08:53 AM Report
Beautiful....Hell even that can't describe this poem. This is going straight to my favorites. Congratulations on your award. You really deserved it.
Comment By: FreeAdri on February 12, 2007 01:31:53 AM Report
Congratulations on winning the feature poem award for this great piece!
Adri x

Comment By: PremiumBlake Hightdudis on February 11, 2007 11:03:12 PM Report
Very excellent piece, congrats on the award :)
Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on February 11, 2007 06:59:06 PM Report
Hannah: lovely heartfelt poem and very deserving of the Feature Poem Award.  Congratulations...

 

Lady Dragonwyck

Comment By: FreeDevilish Minx on January 31, 2007 02:19:42 AM Report
beautiful, sadly to say I had to choke back the tears...pieces like this always touch me so deep within, having a fried and love within the military, and watching so many families go through this...
Laura

Comment By: FreeQuiltingLady on January 27, 2007 06:18:58 PM Report
This is really beautiful!  I can feel his pain and some of the comfort that came from the father's words.  I come from a family of soldiers, marines and sailors so I know the pain of seperation.

Patty

Comment By: FreeGoliath Assassin on January 22, 2007 08:15:55 PM Report
(sob)  Great... (shivering metal)  Now you'll have to call me "Rusty!"  (nose horn)  You sure know the weak spot of a warrior's heart... "Bu-wheeee!"
Comment By: FreeFLETCHER on January 15, 2007 12:00:01 PM Report
Highly Creative!
Excellent write!
Yours ....Fletch

Comment By: FreeJames Lagoski on January 13, 2007 08:14:49 AM Report
Dear Hannah-
I stand and applaud this piece of writing-
The structure of the beginning freely allowed the
story to enhance and absorb the readers mind-
I could actually feel the pain of the subject and felt
compassion for the familys pain-
I believe the reality of this situation also made the
poem very real to me or anyone who reads this-
A magnificent job of writing a situation many families
are dealing with through the ignorance of political war-
Bravo!
Best Wishes to You and Yours My Friend~
Peace~
James

Comment By: FreeGraham Jones on December 31, 2006 05:55:10 AM Report
Brilliant Hannah, this was truely a pleasure to read.
Comment By: FreeKevin Dutton on December 30, 2006 01:06:39 PM Report
Wow, that is amazing Hannah.  Absolutely fantastic.

 

Best poem I've seen on here in a long long time.

 

Kx





 


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