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Author Name: Premiumwordsworthswords 9 Comments
Date Added: February 03, 2007 20:02:41 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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ALL I NEED IS YOU TO MAKE ME RIGHT
The pitch of my voice is rasping,
the breath of my heart is gasping,
all I need is you to make me right.

My vision is turning hazy,
my thoughts have become crazy,
all I need is you to make me right.

My judgement has become poor,
my confidence has become unsure,
all I need is you to make me right.
Author's Notes:

I read a poem by Pamela Lamppa titled "The Breath Of My Heart". That title inspired this, thank you so much Pam, Joe

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Comments:
Comment By: FreeLubaina on September 16, 2008 01:02:26 PM Report
Another work of perfection!

Comment By: FreeSandra M.Hill Veinot on August 25, 2007 10:10:55 AM Report
very up lifting thoughts.

S.~

Comment By: FreeSusan on February 12, 2007 11:27:00 AM Report
Wow, what a way to brighten the day and bring deep thoughts to mind
Comment By: Freetasmia on February 10, 2007 03:37:01 AM Report
really lovely verses...a treat for the readers here...
Comment By: FreeGlata on February 5, 2007 12:54:10 PM Report
This is the type of inspiration we all hope to give one another when we post...I know that I do, anyway. I love to know that something that I've written and posted can inspire another writer to do something this beautiful.

Fantastic work!

Hugs...

Glata

Comment By: Freeb doneff on February 4, 2007 07:42:16 PM Report
Oh it's soooo nice to be needed! (LOL)..sweet Joe, as only our resident Romeo  could have said, sigh...now...what is it you want to be right about..??? I suppose it wouldn't hurt me to allow you to be right for once, lol...
forgive me...a little time on the puter and I am giddy as a kid in a candy store...

b

Comment By: ModeratorHenry M. on February 4, 2007 11:53:32 AM Report
I am so glad that you were inspired by Pam, she has been an inspiration to so many here. What I am even happier about though, is that this poem wasn't about A CAT, A BAT, A SPIDER OR A FISH!!!!! I am however so very disappointed that you did not choose to write about  A CENTIPEDE!!! LOL, seriously Joe, this was a very nice write.    Henry
Comment By: PremiumVizualEnsemble on February 4, 2007 06:14:29 AM Report
This is great but I feel it must go on....there just has to be more there...leaves

one with many ponders, wonders and questions.....great start to a masterpiece

here....tis awesome, as it is but to know what it is you need her to do,

to make it right...what completes this one....will we ever know??? Still,

I enjoyed it dear. Just got me a little on the curious side now :). Don't

leave me hanging !! :)

~Pennhy~

Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on February 4, 2007 03:28:32 AM Report
You posted EIGHT poems scince earlier today, buddy..Have you been going to the India School of Speed Poetry???...SHEESH!!..THis is good, as far as ir goes, It seems ro be an intro into a poem, rather than a poem ; itself. The ending of each two-line verse is effective.. After this three stanzas, in my mind, I heard a poem that the three stanzas built up to to where the reader might find out why she is so needed by you...len




 


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