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Author Name: Freeavanheerden 43 Comments
Date Added: February 20, 2007 08:02:07 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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The Rains down in Africa
You can hear the rain;
It’s coming from afar…
A stampede of dripping notes
covering Africa in a wave of life.
Approaching like a drawing curtain,
consuming all in its path.

The magnificence of her sight, exploding!
Natures perfection, her most beautiful child…
It’s Africa. Darkest Africa;
who is life in a world of lies…
Where nature is raw, but splendor is real...
Here, when the rain is coming,

You see that, oh so clear.
Author's Notes:
It will never be a brilliant as yours Ross, but here is mine...  :o) 

Thank you to Mr. Cool and Ross for the tweaking suggestions!!! 
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Comments:
Comment By: FreeJ.M. on September 29, 2017 05:55:18 PM Report
This is such a beautiful piece. So rich and layered, it gives the reader something to sink their teeth into. And the imagery truly puts you there. I love the way you write, and your kindness. Recalling your encouraging comments is one of the things that have me returning to this site. Well done Adri!

Comment By: Freeken on October 5, 2012 04:36:11 PM Report
I once sat in a rowboat and watched a storm of heavy rains cross far side of the lake; I could hear the roaring, see the line of turbulence and the wall of darkness though I was sitting in the sun; it felt like this poem. :)


Comment By: FreeSteve on June 28, 2010 12:56:21 AM Report
A well deserved award for a gifted writer!
Comment By: FreeDamon D. Brewer on April 7, 2010 03:31:57 AM Report
Beautifully written about ones own country, and I feel the love you have for it coming out in this ever so beautiful write Adri.

Damon
Comment By: FreeBlack on July 9, 2009 03:34:50 AM Report
This is a trance like poem, as though you called forward another part of your conscience to help you clearly picture and write what was rooted in your mind. Words can't really get out what I mean so I'll just internet clap you...

::Applauds::

Comment By: FreeKeith J on April 16, 2009 05:00:26 AM Report
I think that most people have already said the things that I wish to. This is more than mere words. This conjurs images, clear and focussed. An excellent write.

Comment By: FreeTia Bayer on June 27, 2008 11:18:14 AM Report
Love this. It's wonderful that, being from Africa, you try and paint a picture for those of us who are not. The visual makes for a great read.

How I'd love you see Africa. :)

<3 Tia

Comment By: FreeCathy on June 27, 2008 07:50:36 AM Report
Congratulations on the award another deserving one at that your words just paint such a beautiuful and clear picture for your reader absolutely perfect to perfection
........Breathtaking .......Cathy

Comment By: FreeSteve on June 13, 2008 07:39:14 AM Report
Such vivid imagery ! Spoken by one who  knows the beauty and the contrasts of Africa.  Well done, you are such a talented writer.  Congratulations on your award. 
Comment By: FreeStephen Owen AKA Passion Hawk on January 8, 2008 07:07:44 AM Report
loved this,so touching,felt the rain from here in dublin,rain is amazing,especially when it is like a curtain,love playing soccer in it,as usual a great write Adri,steve
Comment By: FreeWilliamGoldenpen on November 11, 2007 02:04:59 PM Report
What can I say that has not been said already?  Suffice to say that I enjoyed reading this and had memories of when I was in Kenya.

William.

Comment By: Freeabby on September 14, 2007 06:06:36 AM Report
You depict the reality and refreshing rainfall

against the raw and false ambience

the rain washes all and makes them clear

 

Abby

Comment By: FreeChuck on July 25, 2007 03:41:54 AM Report
I love the way this one moves...and stops...and clears...it's perfect...nice job... I can hear the rain falling in this piece...

Comment By: FreeRobin Constantinou on July 3, 2007 06:19:33 AM Report
wow thats such a deep poem, i love this, just drips imagery, depth and imagination, so well written, its raining here at the moment, and i cant just help watching it, bravo on the award

Comment By: FreeCraig David Dawson on July 2, 2007 09:39:16 AM Report
you paint pictures in my mind. :)
Comment By: FreeCraig David Dawson on July 2, 2007 09:37:25 AM Report
you paint pictures in my mind. :)
Comment By: Freesherry wilbur on May 29, 2007 10:28:24 AM Report
WHAT CAN I SAY THAT HASN'T ALREADY BEEN SAID,  VERY NICELY DONE , VERY NICEW. HUGS SHERRY
Comment By: Freemishack on March 25, 2007 09:05:38 AM Report
you know everytime i look at nature, i feel so inspired and encouraged, thats why i love Africa with all my heart,  You are brilliant.

 

Once again well done!!!!

Comment By: FreeGoliath Assassin on March 13, 2007 03:53:54 AM Report
"Not good" my butt!  Hah!  Take your award and wave to the people, dear!  We're all in agreement on this one!
Comment By: PremiumNeil on March 12, 2007 10:17:50 AM Report
i agree with roger..i love that line 'a stampede of dripping notes'

brilliant descriptive magnificent

 

and i love curtains of rain...we have them all the time

am so happy for you Adri

Neil

Comment By: FreeRoger Bacon on March 7, 2007 09:45:33 PM Report
I love the line 'a stampede of dripping notes'.  Congrats on a well deserved award.
Comment By: PremiumMary Lou Allen on March 7, 2007 05:00:09 PM Report
Adri, it's just wonderful.  Such a well deserved award.  It's better every time I read it.  It's certainly a favorite with me.  Good work.  And congratulations.  ML
Comment By: PremiumGlata on March 7, 2007 11:03:39 AM Report
Yeah, uh huh...not good, huh???? Now, Look again, Ah, dear...and tell me that! LOL Girl, I'm SOOOOO proud of ya! VERY well earned award, and  I can't help but smile ear to ear.

Hugs a nd love ya!

GG

Comment By: FreeS on March 6, 2007 02:20:12 PM Report
great poem

 

Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on March 6, 2007 04:44:26 AM Report
oh this is splendid! I could visualise that blessed curtain bringing life giving rain to people, animals and plants alike. It had a feel of magnificence about it well done

 

Ali x

Comment By: FreeMISS_VEE on March 6, 2007 04:26:08 AM Report
Hiya chick, beautiful.....really beautiful write

 

hey tell Bruce i'll send sum of our rain to you n u can pass it on lol

 

love VEE xx

Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on March 5, 2007 02:08:03 PM Report
Adri: Feature Poem Award - so deserved for this lovely write --

 

Lady D

Comment By: PremiumBlake Hightdudis on March 5, 2007 01:13:14 PM Report
Wonderful piece, Congrats on your award.
Comment By: FreeKaren Marrah on March 5, 2007 11:17:30 AM Report
This is a very nice piece Adri. Congratulations on your award.

Karen

Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on March 2, 2007 01:59:08 AM Report
Love this Adri, nicely done hun, Joe
Comment By: FreeWide Awake on March 1, 2007 10:08:04 AM Report
Oh WOW Adri!...

What an exquisite glimpse into what you make sound like magic and glory wove into one...I am terribly longful to see such a vision...spectacular, the impact this poem had on me Adri...as though filling me with colors, with life, just as those parched lands are...

Wonderful! You have outdone yourself on this one~

Hugs,
Pamela

Comment By: FreeFLETCHER on February 25, 2007 12:20:00 PM Report
Elligant write Adri!
Your style combines grace, class, polish and charm.
You take the reader there. MORE.............MORE   
 BRAVO!

Yours ....Fletch

Comment By: PremiumMary Lou Allen on February 24, 2007 10:28:28 AM Report
I love this, Adri.  Beautiful work.  Beautiful imagery.  You've made me see The Rains down in Africa.  The phrase "...nature is raw, but splendor is real..." just knocks me out.  Beautiful.  Well done.  ML

Comment By: FreeBarbara Demasson on February 22, 2007 02:06:08 AM Report
Dear Adri,

"A stampede of dripping notes"....my favorite (splendid) line in this poem! I think "beauty" is used too often in the last verse. It is a word that isn't descriptive enough, it would be better for you to show what you see when you describe "beauty or beautiful". Show us what you see, like you have in the first fine verse. 

 

Write on girlfriend, I love it when you SHOW us the view through your eyes! =))

 

~Barbara~ 

Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on February 21, 2007 01:36:01 PM Report
That looks great! What about a recording?
Comment By: FreeHenry M. on February 21, 2007 10:26:00 AM Report
Love this one Adri, it reminds me of the somg by Toto called Africa.  Henry
Comment By: FreeMISS_VEE on February 21, 2007 10:16:03 AM Report
hmm.... i guess we take rain for granted because its there 24-7.

i bet dancing in the rain means so much more there.....

yep im drunk.....btw

 

love u loads hunny

 

VEE x

Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on February 21, 2007 02:40:28 AM Report
Don't EVER compere youself to another writer. That's self-defeating and based in the assumption that someone else's stylee is better than your own. You can no more write like Ross than I can write like you, kid..

The beauty of her sight, exploding!
Natures perfection, her most beautiful child…
It’s Africa. Darkest Africa;
who is life in a world of lies…
Where nature is raw, but beauty is real...
Here, when the rain is coming,

You see that so clear."

That's just lovely poetry, Juicy Girl..I mean that...len

 

Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on February 20, 2007 11:13:40 PM Report
you see that so clear.

 

I would put that on a separate line to increase the impact. Do you think?

Comment By: FreeSilkinTears on February 20, 2007 04:42:24 PM Report
I didn't read Ross's but I think this is beautiful. The rain in Africa well explained.
Helen

Comment By: FreeSharon Jorcil James on February 20, 2007 01:46:13 PM Report
Beautifully descriptive of your country.....and written with a deep sense of patriotism and passion as well.

I love the rain and welcome it anyday.....except when I have to party of course!!

Lovely write my dear.

 

Sharon JJ

 

 

Comment By: FreeLast Temple Knight on February 20, 2007 01:01:00 PM Report
The power of nature unleashed through its rain... I welcome the rain my friend! :o)
Comment By: PremiumGlata on February 20, 2007 08:51:29 AM Report
Personally, I think it's beautiful! You've described the life-giving force here wonderfully, Adri! Wonderful work...

Hugs!

Glata





 


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