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Author Name: FreeSensual Sorceress 22 Comments
Date Added: May 10, 2007 10:05:05 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Eviscerated
I was a
Fragile receptacle,
Created to
Hold your abundant venom. 
This cruel poison,
Methodically
Killing every frugal drop
Of kindness or love.
You skillfully
Administered enough
Antidote to sustain life,
And prolong agony;
Continually breaking down 
Previous immunities.
As the last painful
Dose of destruction
Ceased to entertain
You, I was
Eviscerated.

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Comment By: FreePaul Peter McLean on June 29, 2011 09:59:20 PM Report
One of the most worth winners of an FPA I've read on here for a while. The title itself suggests that the pooem isn't going to make for easy reading, and it certainly did its job. The poem is relentlessly bleak and dark (exactly like the existence it tells of), but so well described that one is carried on from line to line. Great work Jolen.
Comment By: Freealley on March 10, 2008 04:25:32 AM Report
I hate leaving comments never know what to say. Being in this same situtaion of neglect,verbal, mental, and physical abuse myself. I know how hard it is... This poem is exactly how it was for me also holding me at arms length but sometimes bringing me close for just an instant to make me feel the hope again to make me care and go on. Then to just push me away or hurt me again! I love how you used venom and poison in this write! That is exactly how it feels for anyone never in this sit. that is how it feels it's a slow poison that eats away at your very soul. Freezing your heart and paralizing your emotions to a point where you feel your not real anymore, nothing is real anymore. And it stays with you the rest of your life. It can drive you crazy as to why this happens. I'm soooo sorry you went threw this and i know you have heard that before but i am took me along time to see it wasnt my fault. I hope your at that point already!

Alley

Comment By: FreeRobin Constantinou on August 21, 2007 11:42:46 AM Report
ohh i like, a power trip of emotions clinging the soul to cleanse the venom inside, great write jolen,

Comment By: FreeAngel on May 26, 2007 04:22:15 PM Report
Just outstanding. Sensational Jody. Congrats
Comment By: FreeSilkinTears on May 26, 2007 10:29:34 AM Report
Raw pain and emotion here Jolen. I feel the anger that rejection brings. Powerful and to the point..no messing with words here. Well deserved award.
Hugs
Helen

Comment By: FreeThe Mystic Poet on May 22, 2007 03:14:23 PM Report
congrats!
Comment By: FreeRoger Bacon on May 21, 2007 07:31:36 PM Report
Can just feel those fangs.  Oooch. 
Comment By: FreeWide Awake on May 21, 2007 03:13:06 PM Report
OUCH...What a metaphor!...think I saw similar veins on your pages...

I will never forget when we first started out here....how you would gripe about wanting to be as good as me........LMFAO! :o)
Whohoa! Watch the woman go, go, go....

Incredible write my friend...what a talent you are....!!

Hugs,
Pamela

Comment By: FreeAdri on May 21, 2007 05:00:02 AM Report
Congratulations on winning the feature poem award my J. 
Adri x

Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on May 20, 2007 06:54:52 PM Report
Super congrats on THIS feature poem award.  It so deserves the award.

 

Lady D

Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on May 20, 2007 05:56:06 PM Report
Man!...The power of this write cannot be overstated, Aces. Guys like this are always insecure cowards who need at leat one place in their pathetic lives where they feel a measure of control. This is hot stuff, my Aces..You got the goods, darlin'...Yereverlovinfurball
Comment By: FreeThe Mystic Poet on May 18, 2007 03:11:53 PM Report
oh my. interresting write.
Comment By: FreeFLETCHER on May 14, 2007 02:40:11 PM Report
Your descriptive words are a brilliant dose of reality for far too many people.
You are truely loved here!  Thanks!
Yours ......Fletch

Comment By: FreeRin Marie on May 14, 2007 02:35:34 PM Report
These words have a sting to them, I hope you can find it in your heart to someday forgive your mother...for your sake, not hers.

 

Love, Rin

Comment By: Freetom on May 12, 2007 02:16:52 PM Report
such a powerful write Ms.S displaying the hurt and pain you have indured and servived

hugs kisses

tom

Comment By: FreeGraham Jones on May 11, 2007 03:32:13 AM Report
So much anger and pain in this write, but you are a survivor as we all can see, another well crafted write.
Comment By: FreeHenry M. on May 10, 2007 07:35:18 PM Report
Ouch!!! These words still have the bite and carry the sting they were intended to carry Jody. May you have a peaceful Mother's day.....

Henry

Comment By: FreeGlata on May 10, 2007 03:31:49 PM Report
I remember this one from before and it's still carrying the same weight! Quite the mother's day write, hon...I'm glad you're a better woman than she apparently was...

Hugs and love ya

Glata

Comment By: Freeb doneff on May 10, 2007 03:14:56 PM Report

Holy hellfire and brimstone..what a powerful write you have here my love. You have chosen to shine through, and become none of her, of this. You are beautiful, talented, and beyond. Most of all, you are just loved by me and others. Nevr forget that, ok?
BB


 


PS Am busier than ever in my life. I have one month or so, and it will be over...thank god! Just know I am thinking of you, k? your loving bb


Comment By: FreeAdri on May 10, 2007 02:18:06 PM Report
WOW...  This is so powerful, so raw so painful nearly.  This is a wonderful piece my J, this is so brutally honest.  Great work. 
Adri x

Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on May 10, 2007 11:25:19 AM Report

Miss Sensual:  Just so I was SURE about this write I too looked up "eviscerated" and damn I was right in my mind.  This is brilliantly stated and so to the point.  I think I would LIKE to send this to me mum-in-law as this is how she makes me feel !!!   Very very forceful write --- enjoyed it but am saddened for you being made to feel this way.


Lady D


 


Comment By: on May 10, 2007 11:10:10 AM Report
i like those college words




 


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