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Comment By:  Valerie Dohren on August 3, 2014 06:43:19 AM |
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Scary, thank goodness it was only a dream. Well written.
Val
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Comment By:  Dan J. Mazurek on September 28, 2011 06:55:35 PM |
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If our dreams finally do come true.
Rich what is left in life for us to do.
Just a thought and a big thank you for living your dream here at creative.
It is an open forum for hearts and has exposed many a writers dream.
Thanks
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| Comment By: maggie lopez sherry wilbur on April 15, 2011 08:46:10 PM |
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I truly enjoyed reading this. This is something I can find myself reading over and over again. Always Maggie.
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| Comment By: Jasmine Christian on November 29, 2010 10:21:06 AM |
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Was it a panther or a demon? A demon panther? A fear can take many forms, and sharing your fears with the one you love often help you both to overcome them, and you can walk away freely. Great write.
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| Comment By: Glata on December 1, 2009 09:12:13 AM |
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Intense write, Rich...good rhythm and rhyme...and chilling, too!
Hugs...
Glata
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| Comment By: Shuberth Dias on October 16, 2009 05:25:00 PM |
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good poem.
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| Comment By: Robin Constantinou on January 16, 2009 07:22:01 AM |
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beautifully penned and pin pointed with excessive emotion, you are a pioneer among the greats
~Robin
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| Comment By: Vince on January 11, 2009 03:53:27 PM |
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Honestly, the last stanza doesn't "sound" quite right to me. It very well could be the song in which is playing on my stereo at the moment (The Dying Song by The Cruxshadows). It seemed that all the other stanzas went along with the rhythm of the song perfectly. Not a big deal.
Still i greatly enjoyed this piece. i especially like the first two lines. Marvelous.
-vin
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| Comment By: Kimber Turpin on January 4, 2009 10:52:05 PM |
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Richard, this was an excellent piece you have penned. I felt I was there with you! My ears are still ringing from the gun shot. :o)
Gypsy
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| Comment By: FLETCHER on December 16, 2008 09:14:59 PM |
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Wondeful write.
The picture is a wonderful add.
Very Creative.
Fletch
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| Comment By: J on November 19, 2008 07:32:19 PM |
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Wow, it's a really moving write. Great piece.
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| Comment By: Samuel E. Stone on November 7, 2008 06:51:18 PM |
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A well written story set to verse... Enjoyed the read...
Wishing you well...
Sam
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| Comment By: Bruce A. Peaslee on October 21, 2008 07:54:12 AM |
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Rich - Glad you shot it in time, ever wonder what would happen if, in your dreams, you'd missed?
Great picture.
---Poetrydad---
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| Comment By: Alison Storm Wolf on October 17, 2008 03:56:54 PM |
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I enjoyed this view into your dream world. As one who translates dreams it comes over as a very powerful and caring dream
'With you waking beside me'
you were in protector mode
There , just at the tree line
a motion of grey on gery
The outline of a great black cat,
Stealthfully coming our way.
This speaks to me of a forthcoming problem, difficulty even person who is heading your way
Hands firm on the rifle,
Found just beyond our door.
Heart pounding, I
faced the threat,
Seeking to take from us what we know
You will reach the challenge
A very powerful message from your higher self to tell you that its going to be ok.
I love to see the way our higher nature speaks to us.
Ali x
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| Comment By: Raymond Pinsonneault on October 13, 2008 07:13:46 PM |
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Oh..a deep beauty..this one Richard...the rhymes, balance, feeling..Funny how we instinctively prepare to kill a wild cat ...Uh..wonder why ?
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| Comment By: S on September 5, 2008 01:49:15 PM |
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great poem man ! really enjoyed it !
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| Comment By: Mary Lou Allen on August 31, 2008 07:04:53 PM |
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You have a way of drawing me into a scene that makes your work so real. It's magic, I bet. In a few words, I'm hooked and it's like being in the action. I'm grateful to you for pulling that trigger. Good choice of photos, too. ML
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| Comment By: Wide Awake on August 31, 2008 06:55:25 PM |
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I know how you feel Richard...I've had dreams of similar nature, where I acted what seemed to me out of character. We really only know ourselves in an action, when faced in that situation for real. Good stuff to ponder beforehand, but we really only know our reactions when faced with the situation.
Beautifully penned.
The ambience was enthralling and drew me right into it.
Hugs,
Pamela
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| Comment By: Cathy on June 3, 2008 08:49:40 PM |
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Wow you just kept me in suspence throught this amazing poem I absolutely loved reading this and loved the pic also
Cathy
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| Comment By: john carter on March 15, 2008 11:50:00 AM |
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This is a great write Richard. Instinctively we live.
John
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| Comment By: Leonard Wilson on October 15, 2007 06:04:25 PM |
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When I was in the navy and living in a house off base, I used to go out in the open field to shoot birds with my BB gun.One night, I dreamed that I shot a bird out of the tree in the front yard. The bird flew down to the porch and transformed into a young man about my age. He looked at me. with a hole in his neck, and said, "Why?"......That was the last bird I ever shot...len
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| Comment By: Michael on June 8, 2007 09:58:40 PM |
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Nicely done, indeed! Be well, Michael
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| Comment By: She Whispers on June 8, 2007 09:31:40 AM |
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Rich, Now this is really a love poem with its mystery and how the night sometimes threatens us with creeping thoughts.. LOve this picture it sets the poem so well.. Wishing you so much happiness my dear friend.... Glad your posting again we all have missed you...
hugs ~ She Whispers
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