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Author Name: FreeSensual Sorceress 26 Comments
Date Added: January 03, 2009 13:01:49 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Type: Free Verse
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Tabula Rasa
In the beginning, we were one,
we were everything and its opposite combined.
Undefined...but, we started out whole.
Yin and Yang, Above and Below
Male and Female, Young and Old.
There was no you or me, no "I" in between.
As the Universe unfurled its
cosmic tapestry, we rode the tassels,
watching stars go supernova and planets
spin along the Milky Way like a basketball
on the fingertips of a Harlem Globetrotter.
We thrived in our nebular cocoon,
nestled against Creation’s canvas.
The sky was expanding, and matter
that resembled agate marbles hurled
from a sling-shot...collided….
And then Darkness…and pain.
We could never be the same.
Suddenly, our reality shattered -
our nimbus cracked and scattered.

Divided into separate consciousness,
sieved through the fabric of time, and flawed.
We’d been sucked into the eternal maw of gravity,
that ultimate depravity.
Worlds were evolving, constantly rearranging,
and we were its playthings.
Destiny was a whore--who promised more
than she delivered.
We were split into two itinerant souls,
born and reborn in age, after age after age.
And I know it may sound strange,
but through the nexus of our existence
we longed for absolution to put an end to this confusion.
And a miracle arrived when our planets aligned,
with a tabula rasa, we welcomed tomorrow.

Author's Notes:
tabula rasa )
an absence of preconceived ideas or predetermined goals; a clean slate
• the human mind, esp. at birth, viewed as having no innate ideas.
ORIGIN Latin, literally ‘scraped tablet,’ denoting a tablet with the writing erased.


 
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Comments:
Comment By: FreeAmy on September 7, 2008 11:57:39 AM Report
wow...standing O.

This is a brilliant piece. Went straight to faves.

So glad this got a Feature. Congrats.

~Amy

Comment By: FreeRobin Constantinou on September 6, 2008 09:30:54 AM Report
wow thats quite a read, amazing that i stumbled on this randomly and i was just listening to a song called tabula rasa by sinch lol, great write
~Robin

Comment By: FreeChuck on September 6, 2008 04:40:01 AM Report
This reminded me of everything I already knew...So obviously I like it a bunch and I'm glad I came by.   Congrats on the award!
Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on September 4, 2008 09:01:09 PM Report
To think this is the lady who but yesterday delivered us the world of male missiles; now, I pause, I stammer, I shudder to realize that against all odds, with utmost courage and unflinching resolve, she has now truly constructed a master's piece.
Comment By: FreeMoon Fairy on September 3, 2008 02:20:18 AM Report
Just as beautiful as ever Jolen...thank you for the definition. My comment would not come out the way I want so not going to try..hehe
Congratulations!
~Tracie

Comment By: FreeSteve on September 1, 2008 07:11:47 PM Report
This is certainly worthy of an award and will shine in the deep blue of the night.
Comment By: FreesHeRi on September 1, 2008 01:02:12 AM Report
Congrats on your award..So glad you had a definition of "Tabula rasa", I had no idea what it was. It is amazing how you incorporated so much into one poem about the seperation of two..what a great imagination and emotional depth you correlate too.

 

Blessings my pen friend,

sHeRi

Comment By: FreeSuzin on August 31, 2008 11:39:27 PM Report
Congratulations on the award for this amazing poem it's so deep and insightful.  I'm going to have to add this one to my favorites, I love this poem!
-Suzin

Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on August 31, 2008 10:33:53 PM Report
I am very firm believer of Tsaoism and this is as close as you can get. Insightful and excellent piece Sorceress. Congrats on the award, Joe
Comment By: Freejess on August 31, 2008 10:01:34 PM Report
oops...Jolen...sorry bout that...just got done reading one of Adri's poems....

 

Congrats on the award Jolen!

Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on August 31, 2008 07:00:03 PM Report
Jolen:  super congratulations on this Feature Poem Award -- very deserved.

 

Lady D

Comment By: Freejohn carter on August 27, 2008 10:49:48 PM Report
you are amazing.

                          John

Comment By: PremiumDavid Turner on August 27, 2008 08:06:10 PM Report
Jolen - this is a substantial and significant piece. You express my view about the spiritual nature of the Cosmos. You capture the majesty of the evolution of the Cosmos beatifully - it is the idea of human consciousness evolving out of the primal matter of the universe that I like so much - the pain of separation from the inherent life force of the cosmos to create intelligent life tha tabula rasa of humanity.

 

Some images and bits of scientific backgound I was not sure about. The planets The simile of

the basketball:-

 

"watching stars go supernova and planets
spin along the Milky Way like a basketball
on the fingertips of a Harlem Globetrotter"

 

The stars revolve around he centre of he Milky Way but planets spin around their star.

 

Also:-

 

"The sky was expanding, and matter
that resembled agate marbles hurled
from a sling-shot...collided…."

Not sure about this either - it is just that agate marbles seem too substantial to represent primeval matter. Perhaps :-

 

"The sky was expanding, and matter

 like dust in a flour mill blown
in a wild wind...collided…."

love David

Comment By: FreeAngel on August 27, 2008 04:29:02 PM Report
Magnificent audio first class
Comment By: FreeAngel on August 27, 2008 06:53:18 AM Report
This was beyond brilliance so unique and the words you write flow like a fountain

 

Love Angelxx

Comment By: FreeEdward Kent on August 27, 2008 05:49:33 AM Report
wrote as only you can Jody. wonderful absolutely wonderful, I've said it before and I'll say it again...YOU ARE A STAR

Comment By: FreeRobert Smith on August 27, 2008 12:30:10 AM Report
As above so below as within so without,  we are so close to a step change I can almost feel it, Fantastic Tinker - Rob
Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on August 26, 2008 02:34:32 PM Report
 A real affirmation of truth and one that adepts may have always known but I swear that new truths are now being delivered to us day by day.

I have seen comments that say that maybe you are being 'helped' by James...but not only do I welcome synergie....but I also rejoice when I see those willing to be channels for the muse being used so wonderfully.

 

 Two 'old souls' coming together and making new poems.....speechless

 

Ali x

Comment By: FreeAdri on August 26, 2008 09:25:46 AM Report
See you are back in full brilliance form.  This is gorgeous.  You have a way with word that I would have killed to have.
Love it, special and intense and beautiful, like poetry was intended to be.
Adri x

Comment By: FreeSteve on August 25, 2008 10:06:53 PM Report

A truly cosmic write strung across the page like a  galaxy evoking some deep thinking.


Comment By: PremiumLindaM on August 25, 2008 10:06:00 PM Report
Wow! This is brilliant Jody. Your writing has moved on to an even higher
level and that is saying allot because it was wonderful when I was here before.
You have captured the imagination of everyone who has read this imaginative
and wonderfully penned poem.
Linda

Comment By: FreeRoger Bacon on August 25, 2008 07:25:30 PM Report
A lot going on here. I like all the direction of up and down, left and right.  It's a good craft/tool in poetry.  Much enjoyed this, and of course a little refresher in my Latin.   
Comment By: FreeHeike on August 25, 2008 04:50:52 PM Report
Jolen, this is a brilliant piece.
I don't claim to understand any of it, but to me it seems like earth's history eddying into a microcosm of soulmates connecting in this mad world of ours. At least that might be one of 1,000 ways to look at this diamond. Thank you.

~Heike

Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on August 25, 2008 04:11:12 PM Report
This is like the spiritual Big Bang story, Aces...I cannot tell you how very impressed with this, and you, I am. Everything beginning as one thing and then exploding into almost infinate pieces, trying to become whole again...This is top-notch writing, darlin'...This kind of stuff makes my hair stand on end....yereverlovinyinyang
Comment By: Freeb doneff on August 25, 2008 12:24:25 PM Report
I suppose you could take this literally, but I took it to be about twins. (Here we go again, Miss Weirdorama strikes out on her own, lol) I read this three times, just to let it all sink in, and still had the twin feeling..anyhow, I loved the thoughts in this. It struck a note of severe independence, and yet, an umbilical cord of same linked the two verses and thoughts.
The entire write was exceptional, as I know ( and love) the woman who thought it all up. And nothing could come out of her that was anything less than that.
What a wonderful thing for me to think about today. Thank you.
bb

Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on August 25, 2008 10:03:35 AM Report
Jolen,
 I read this twice capturing all its meaning.....Very well written with deep thought
You write with such a terrific style that is
your very own...
 It is always great to read your poetic heart...
 How is the weather there in England ???
It is a beautiful sunny cool day in Texas....
I was up with the singing birds this morning...
 HUgs and LOve ~ She Whispers





 


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