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Author Name: Freeciteop 3 Comments
Date Added: November 16, 2011 18:11:10 Average Score: (Needs 1)
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Type: Rhyming
Category: Love Add To Favorites | Text Only
 
Silence becomes a science.
I held my breath and became buried beneath a bed of water an ocean of words crashing passionate against the banks of your lips. Was it fate that brought us to this? Was it faith you ignored when we kissed? the clam of your voice was over ran by the roar of the storm thunder struck our fears,lighting tore through the heart of our ship in the heart of it all we became damaged in the process, I managed to stay honest, never lost my purpose a promise to mother earth that I would change lives. As the tides changed it started crashing down thrashing at our bodies the sound of the wind whipping at our faces. The cold reached out and grabbed a hold of my lungs, I begun to breathe the blue seas breath holding you close trying to stay awake and keep you safe. As we washed ashore a mix of sand and seed weed it was so much more when it painted are faces. With our frames imprinted in the sand I dust it away from your face as your silhouettes embrace lie a wreck in my arms a body tattooed by bruises the lavender color in this moment  its unique in same way how your body movement was twisted by the tide. I wipe the water aside and with my beating heart I do not hesitate to keep you safe I place my hands on your chest 123 breathe on the exhale I repeat the process of CPR, my breath sets sail knowing Iím not giving up on what I promised. I breathe the only air I have left to try and save you from learning about the truth about death you cough up silence from your lungs and air becomes life itís there I fall to your breathing: itís there I realise that silence becomes a science when we mix chemistry with sympathy and just breathe.
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Comment By: FreeDerek Tower on June 22, 2012 10:00:48 AM Report
I almost never comment... this is my second one for you. If you're interested in correcting the grammar and spelling a bit I'd be happy to help. That's the technical side of writing, and in my opinion, it's not super important. As for the creative side, you use imagery and metaphors like it's in your blood. Very well done, very talented write.


Comment By: PremiumHOPE on November 16, 2011 07:32:10 PM Report
Wow, Intense emotions flooded over me, you got me jumping at 123 breathe,  I was shouting breathe damn it breathe. The struggle of love and living through it grabbed me.  I had stopped breathing for a second until the end of the poem.  On the edge of my seat.  (lucky I didn't pass out).  I loved this Tina
Comment By: FreeRobin on November 16, 2011 07:05:33 PM Report
interesting read this is.




 


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