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Author Name: FreeSensual Sorceress 9 Comments
Date Added: September 15, 2012 05:09:54 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Crooked Cavalier
The old man advances into view,
his spine twisted as a rumor.
Immune, in an armored chariot, 
I watch his cumulus breath escape 
the trenches of a dignified chest
and climb steadily atop the gelid air.
Slush-covered feet navigate a few steps
before he stops, reaches into a pocket
to retrieve one tattered black glove.
He slips it over his chaffed hand
like a gauntlet, takes up the reins
of his silver-wheeled shopping steed
and crookedly braces the world’s
elements, scanning the battlefield.
Author's Notes:
 I wrote this after watching an old man come out of a small grocery store one snowy night.
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Comments:
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on September 16, 2012 04:31:57 PM Report

This is so cute, Darlin'.....Grocery stores can be baTTLE GROUNDS...i LOVE THE ORIGINALITY OF THIS IMAGE...



"The old man advances into view,
his spine twisted as a rumor.....That's the kind of line a real writer produces......Yer Furball

 

Comment By: FreeAlistair Muir on September 16, 2012 01:09:56 PM Report
Beautifully descriptive and a fantastic use of language -- I loved it --



Alistair

Comment By: PremiumHarry William Harborne on September 15, 2012 07:38:32 PM Report
It is clear we will all be there one day. some of us sooner than others. You paint a sad and bleak canvass of how it will be for many. The wonders of science has made it possible for peole to live much longer, one wonders if that is appreciated by the man in your poem.    Bill Harborne
Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on September 15, 2012 06:32:21 PM Report


Just brilliant your a artist of the vivid poetry language...

YOur so gifted with your own style such a delight to always read...

 Always ~ She Whispers

Comment By: PremiumBlake Hightdudis on September 15, 2012 12:31:40 PM Report
I really like this, you painted a picture that was visual that was painted brilliantly with your words.
Comment By: FreeAdri on September 15, 2012 11:11:57 AM Report
I get a lump in my throat just thinking about it. I can not see people suffer, especially the elderly. 
You are on form. The exquisite use of language, the perfect rhythm. Beautiful work

Adri 

Comment By: FreeHenry M. on September 15, 2012 09:59:02 AM Report
THE DAILY BATTLES FACED HEAD ON BY OUR ELDERLY...... IN MY EYES THEY ARE THE STRONG AND COULD TEACH OUR YOUTH A THING OR TWO ABOUT HAVING THE STRENGTH AND WILL TO PUSH ON WITHOUT MOST OF LIFE'S LUXURIES. EXCELLENT POEM JOLEN.  HUGS,  HENRY
Comment By: FreeKymberly Donn on September 15, 2012 09:50:48 AM Report
How do I leave a comment after the one Len left? lol  The piece is silk upon a page, the word usage is sublime and the imagery bang on! (My best Ross impression(though I'm pretty sure he wouldn't have said bang on)) LOL 



~Cinders~ Love this and you!

Comment By: FreeTomahawk on September 15, 2012 07:01:28 AM Report


For some elderly people, every day is like a battle of one kind or another, sometimes the battle just to exist is their windmill, in a Quixote-esque type existence. Nice piece, Jolen.


 


Len





 


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