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Author Name: FreeTomahawk 5 Comments
Date Added: July 15, 2013 12:07:31 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Type: Free Verse
Category: Broken Hearts Add To Favorites | Text Only
 
Penance
And I thought that you
had some semblance of a heart
but instead, you stole mine
and broke it into a thousand pieces

Battered, shattered and scattered
there's a hole now, where my heart was
I feel absolutely nothing now
I'm less than human....a drone

And where do broken hearts go?
just ask the lonely
yet strangely, I'm not at all lonely
because you need to be human, first

The hell of it all, was....
I knew what you were, all along
but I took the gamble
with feelings that weren't mine

And I lost, didn't I?
So now, I'm become heartless
cold, jaded, barren of remorse
I'm become dead, I'm become....you

I believe this is my penance
for seeing good in you
that wasn't really there, at all
so maybe now, we truly belong together

Souls, without any redeeming qualities
just mindless passion that is empty
as ephemeral as our sexual congress
hollow inside and robotic cold

Ectasy, then nothing to mark the event
oh, we can go on like this forever
mindless, souless, painless....
can you say....loveless?

Cuz, what's love got to do with it?!



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Comments:
Comment By: FreeMoonStar on July 16, 2013 04:43:25 AM Report

Wow... Okay this blew me away..  Always enjoy what you bring forth. Makes you sit up and take notice, know what I mean? I agree with Mitzee on this.. We all have our walls of protection, sometimes they make us look cold as hell. While deep within we may just be frightened little children..  Okay bad choice of words.. But you get my meaning.. Many of us act strong for fear of getting hurt! There that's better!!

 




 

Mucho love

Moonie xo


 

Comment By: Freeleahlopez on July 15, 2013 05:51:05 PM Report

Sometimes we tell ourselves we have become heartless in order for protection. We don't always mean it, we become scared and try to withdraw ourselves from society. Then, when we do meet someone, it takes a while for our barriers to collapse. This poem is filled with emotion, anger that perhaps needed to get out, if based on your life, excellent job Len.

 

MITZEE

Comment By: FreeBrian Dziokonski on July 15, 2013 01:41:50 PM Report
Now that's expressing yourself! Those angry cards are slapped right down on the table. "I took a gamble with feelings that weren't mine" is a great great line! I'm going to hold off with the advice giving and just say that was a heavy hard hitting well written free verse. Brian
Comment By: PremiumBlake Hightdudis on July 15, 2013 01:33:53 PM Report
Wow this was brilliant, and like you were inside of me.
Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on July 15, 2013 01:33:10 PM Report


Heart breaking to read ..how often do mst of us feel this way ....

Every thing goes hay wire we become lost souls with no feelings only misery....Life less

 My heart breaks for you ..deserve so much more.. Hugs and LOve ~ India





 


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