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Author Name: Freemajik1213 10 Comments
Date Added: November 18, 2003 17:11:33 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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4 *
Twenty lilies stream slovenly in a swarthy swamp

"oh, but they don't belong there"

said the scholar, holding a compass

"this is most incongruent"


"Yet the lilies still stream

as though we had not seen

a scene of incongruity"

said the owl

"Twenty lilies rue

of the many woes undue

since twenty men could see

with transparent clarity"

said the crazy candy cane

That sat like a box on a box

Author's Notes:
This poem is a lesson. It's lesson is that you should take some things in life as they come. Some things simply have no psychologically satisfying reason.

The "compass" shows that the scholar is a mathematician; therefore, he is an analytical thinker. I included that as a little jest towards the lefties out there (no hard feelings). I feel that the right-sided thinkers will agree to this poem's lesson more so than will a left-sided thinker.

"Most" - This line is a jab at the scholar and is an example of irony. Whereas a person could expect the scholar to know virtually everything, this scholar fails to realize that there is no measurable degree on incongruity; something either is incongruent or it isn't. This the case, a reader may feel that the lack of grammatical accuracy compliments the scholar's lack of perspicacity.

I, the poet, said "Most?" I said this because I was offended that the scholar interrupted my poem to analyze it! Here I was writing, and right away he goes and says, "oh but they don't belong there." So, rather than go into some arguement that I probably would lose, I caviled and quibbled, defeating him ultimately with the one question, "Most?"

The owl is a symbol of wisdom. This is in sharp contrast to the scholar, who is a pedantic man who offers no pertinent wisdom.

Transparent clarity - Transparent, unlike clear, means that the clarity is in terms of emptiness, whereas clear could mean complete, undiluted understanding. In seeing the modifying adjective, transparent, a reader realizes that, although the scholar offered a "solution" to the "problem" in a clear fashion, he was entirely "wrong." This situation is similar to one in which a person claims that 4 x 2 = 7 since 2 + 2 = 4 and 7/4 = 2. Whereas the explanation is precise, the accuracy of the content is entirely off.

"said the crazy candy cane
That sat like a box on a box
The purpose of the final couplet is to confuse the reader. See the lesson of the poem.
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Comment By: FreeStephen Owen AKA Passion Hawk on April 1, 2004 03:03:36 AM Report
comment was more interesting than poem mate...steve
Comment By: FreeErik Anderson on March 12, 2004 04:26:20 AM Report
Wow, how very unique. I must say I approve whole heartedly. bravo! --Erik
Comment By: FreePaul Walsh on February 28, 2004 10:38:05 AM Report
We should all be a bit more like Pooh than that scholar nd take each day and situation as they come without thinking too much.
While Eeyore frets.....
and Tigger bounces.....
and Owl pontificates
.... Pooh just is.
Comment By: FreeCara on February 15, 2004 09:28:28 PM Report
This is a neat write. I like what you're saying and it's true. Sometimes you just gotta smile and take it for what it is, and appreciate it while it lasts. Great write.
Comment By: FreeJennifer on February 9, 2004 02:42:38 AM Report
You are a genious!!!

Comment By: FreeKeri on February 4, 2004 01:23:29 PM Report
I usually am a pretty analytical thinker, but I am also very creative. This gave me enough to think about, on both sides, for a while. I really like this. Write on.
Comment By: FreeMarinaJoann on January 21, 2004 02:24:59 AM Report
Thanks for the labeling. I'll be sure to stay away from the ** unless of course I want a headache. Hey you could tell us the greek origin of all the nice words you use. I'm sure they will be relevant to our understanding........J/K this was very interesting.
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on January 17, 2004 05:17:02 AM Report
If you say so.Need some hip boots,here...len
Comment By: FreeJeff on December 23, 2003 09:53:12 PM Report
You are a very interesting writer Drew.
Look forward to you posting more of your work.
Comment By: Freekumorin on November 18, 2003 08:52:12 PM Report
That's post-ironically ironic... (^^)
That you took almost as many lines to explain the poem whose message is "take things as they come" as you did in the poem itself. I like the wording, wordage, worditting of it all.


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